[NRO-IANAXFER] Internet Number Community IANA Stewardship Proposal: First Draft

[Seun Ojedeji]

Hello Izumi,

Thanks for the share, kindly find below a few comments/suggestions (first
attempt)

- The entire first paragraph of section III should be deleted as it does
not add any more value to the response for that section

- I suggest replacing the word contract in section III with agreement and
this will also largely require re-wording of 3rd paragraph of section IV

- The agreement (currently referred to as contract) should not be termed
based as presumed to be indicated in section III but should have
termination conditions

- The Review committee may not necessarily be required as i believe the
role of ICANN is clear and the termination conditions will be largely tied
to the gPDP plus other technical operations efficiencies. In view of this,
i propose that the review of compliance to agreement terms be handled
mainly by the NRO-NC but in conjunction with NRO-EC.

However if there is more consensus towards establishing a review team i
will still be okay with it (although its extra cost) but will then strongly
suggest that the selection of the committee be done by the COMMUNITY. I
propose that the community of each RIR should elect a member while the
chair of the NRO-EC at any point in time will be co-opted to serve as the
review team (6 in total)

Finally on a related note, i suggest a minor update of section 10 of the
gPDP as follow:

In case Step 9 (c), should at least *two* of the RIRs agree that changes
need to be made

Thanks

Regards

On Fri, Dec 19, 2014 at 5:01 AM, Izumi Okutani <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:
>
> Dear colleagues,
>
>
> Please find the first draft of the Internet numbers community's response
> to the Request For Proposals issued by the IANA Stewardship Coordination
> Group (ICG). This draft has been prepared by the Consolidated RIR IANA
> Stewardship Proposal (CRISP) team, and we are now seeking feedback on
> this draft from the global community.
>
> The next CRISP team teleconference will be held on Monday 22 December at
> 13:00 UTC. Details on how to join as an observer will be posted to this
> list.
>
>  Draft proposal: https://www.nro.net/crisp-proposal-first-draft
>
>  The deadline for providing feedback: 5 January 2015
>  Feedback should be sent to         : <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list
>
>  Key points:
>   - ICANN to continue as an operator of the IANA function:
>   - Agreement: Exchange SLA with ICANN as the IANA function
>                operator on number resources
>   - Review Committee with representatives from each RIR region
>
>  Other notes about the draft:
>  The following will be reflected in the second draft.
>
>   - The first two sentences of the last paragraph in Section III
>    "Proposed Post-Transition Oversight and Accountability Arrangements"
>     is under consideration by CRISP Team to be deleted.
>   - In addition, CRISP Team continues work on editing, to have our
>     answers in the same order as questions listed in each section.
>
>  Key dates:
>    First draft published            : 19 Dec 2014
>    First draft comments close       :  5 Jan 2015
>    Second draft to be published     :  8 Jan 2015
>    Second draft comments close      : 12 Jan 2015
>    Final proposal to be sent to ICG : 15 Jan 2015
>
>  How to engage in discussions:
>   All global discussions, for CRISP team to consider as community
>   feedback, will be conducted at <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.
>   All CRISP team discussions are open to observers.
>
> References:
> ------------
> * Discussions by CRISP Team
>     Details of all the CRISP team's work to date, including recordings,
>     minutes and agendas of all CRISP teleconferences and a public
>     archive of the internal CRISP team mailing list, are available at:
>     https://nro.net/crisp-team
>
> * Other links:
>   - ICG request for proposals:
>    <https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-3-2014-09-03-en>
>
>   - The IANA Stewardship Transition Discussion in each RIR region:
>
> <
> https://www.nro.net/nro-and-internet-governance/iana-oversight/timeline-for-rirs-engagement-in-iana-stewardship-transition-process
> >
>
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