[CRISP-TEAM] Updated Draft Comment to the CWG Proposal

[Michael Abejuela]

Hello CRISP Team,

Attached is the redline and clean version of the final draft for the comments to the CWG-Stewardship. You will observe edits in response to Izumi, Nurani and Andrei’s comments as well as minor grammar and typo fixes.

Thank you to everyone’s quick review and comment since the call. If you have any questions, please let me know.

Thanks,
-Michael


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From: Michael Abejuela <mabejuela at arin.net<mailto:mabejuela at arin.net>>
Date: Monday, May 18, 2015 at 1:58 PM
To: Michael Abejuela <mabejuela at arin.net<mailto:mabejuela at arin.net>>, "crisp at nro.net<mailto:crisp at nro.net>" <crisp at nro.net<mailto:crisp at nro.net>>
Subject: Re: [CRISP-TEAM] Updated Draft Comment to the CWG Proposal

Comment from Izumi (remotely):

One minor suggestion to amend:

"Our input below will focus on stating the position of the Numbers community as found in the Numbers community proposal, seek clarification…”

to

"Our input below will focus on stating the positions of the Numbers community as found in the Numbers community proposal, seek clarification…"



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Michael R. Abejuela
Associate General Counsel
ARIN
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Suite 200
Chantilly, VA 20151
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(703) 263-0111 (f)
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From: Michael Abejuela <mabejuela at arin.net<mailto:mabejuela at arin.net>>
Date: Monday, May 18, 2015 at 12:36 PM
To: "crisp at nro.net<mailto:crisp at nro.net>" <crisp at nro.net<mailto:crisp at nro.net>>
Subject: [CRISP-TEAM] Updated Draft Comment to the CWG Proposal

Hello CRISP Team,

As discussed during the CRISP call earlier today, I have compiled the comments received on the draft document in an attempt to harmonize for finalization and sending to the CWG-Stewardship.  You will observe two documents attached.  I took the last redline with comments prior to our call today and accepted all changes.  I then created a redline against that document to show any additional changes I made/suggested which is the redline document attached.  I also created a clean version of the redline document for ease of your reading and review.

Please provide any questions, comments, concerns or desired edits at your earliest convenience and no later than 1800 UTC so that I can work with Izumi and Nurani to finalize and have it sent by 1900 UTC to the CWG-Stewardship.

Thanks,
-Michael

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Michael R. Abejuela
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ARIN
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Suite 200
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