[CRISP-TEAM] Feedback before UTC14:30 Re: Draft response on the IANAXFER Fwd: Re: Next steps?

Mon Jan 26 15:40:43 CET 2015

I like these suggested changes

+1

On 1/26/15, 9:37 AM, "Michael Abejuela" <mabejuela at arin.net> wrote:

>Just a few edits for the groups consideration:
>
>Any reference to ³require² perhaps is better changed to ³reference²?
>
>³RIRs acknowledges this proposal which require actions by them²
>to
>³RIRs acknowledge this proposal which references actions by them"
>
>
>and
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>"submitted to the ICG which require actions by the RIRs"
>
>to
>"submitted to the ICG which references actions by the RIRs"
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>
>And this reference to be slightly changed as follows:
>
>"that necessary actions will be taken by RIRs to implement the proposal"
>to
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>³that the RIRs will take the appropriate steps to implement the proposal"
>
>Lastly, a couple minor style/typo edits:
>
>"The charter of review committee and Contract actual text is the
>implementation of the proposal where RIRs are responsible.²
>to
>³The charter of the review committee and actual contract text are part of
>implementation of the proposal which is the responsibility of the RIRs²
>
>"While our role as the CRISP Team is providing guidance to the RIRs in the
>implementation, and the decision of the implementation and its
>preparations is for the RIRs to make"
>To
>³While our role as the CRISP team is to provide guidance to the RIRs in
>the implementation of the proposal, the details and process of
>implementation of the proposal is the responsibility of the RIRs.
>
>"RIRs to make, the CRISP Team believe it is important²
>to
>³Šresponsibility of the RIRs.(edit from above) The CRISP Team believes it
>is important...²  (breaking into separate sentence and adding ³s² to
>believe)
>
>"We trust the RIRs will consult with relevant community as needed in
>preparing the SLA²
>to
>³We trust each RIR will consult with their respective communities as
>needed in preparing the SLA²
>
>
>Just a few of my thoughts.
>
>Thanks,
>-Michael
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>On 1/26/15, 6:38 AM, "Izumi Okutani" <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:
>
>>CRISP Team,
>>
>>
>>For this as well, I will wait until UTC14:30 today Jan 26th for feedback
>>before sending this out.
>>
>>Please let me know if you have any concerns/suggestions for changes or
>>would like me to hold sending it at above time, so you have more time to
>>review.
>>
>>
>>
>>Thanks,
>>Izumi
>>
>>
>>On 2015/01/24 2:10, Izumi Okutani wrote:
>>> CRISP Team,
>>>
>>>
>>> Please see my draft response to the IANAXFER list regarding the next
>>>steps.
>>>
>>> I tried to incorporate our discussions in "Future steps and
>>> communicating with RIRs" thread, and welcome any feedback or
>>> clarifications you may have.
>>>
>>> Before I send this out, I do wish to hear especially from RIR staff who
>>> are the CRISP Team members, in case this description about our
>>> expections from the RIRs causes any issues or concerns for the RIRs.
>>>
>>>
>>> Thanks,
>>> Izumi
>>>
>>>
>>> ----
>>> Hello Seun and colleagues on the IANAXFER list,
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Thank you once again Seun for your question about the next steps.
>>> I think this is a useful question for others in the community as well.
>>>
>>> As you are aware, our proposal to the ICG describes high level
>>> principles about the Review Committee and the SLA including "IANA
>>> Service Level Agreement Principles" in the proposal, so RIRs will
>>> consider implementation based on this guidance.
>>>
>>> The charter of review committee and Contract actual text is the
>>> implementation of the proposal where RIRs are responsible.
>>>
>>> While our role as the CRISP Team is providing guidance to the RIRs in
>>> the implementation, and the decision of the implementation and its
>>> preparations is for the RIRs to make, the CRISP Team believe it is
>>> important for the community to have clear visibility that RIRs
>>> acknowledges this proposal which require actions by them.
>>>
>>> Therefore, after Step2 of the ICG's latest timeline, when the proposals
>>> by all three operational communities are consolidated by the ICG, the
>>> CRISP Team plans to formally inform the executives of the RIRs about
>>>the
>>> proposal submitted to the ICG which require actions by the RIRs.
>>>
>>>
>>>https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/icg-process-timeline-07jan15
>>>-
>>>en.pdf
>>>
>>> We expect that there will be formal acknowledgement from the five RIRs
>>> about this, so it is clear to the community that necessary actions will
>>> be taken by RIRs to implement the proposal from the Number Resources
>>> community. We trust the RIRs will consult with relevant community as
>>> needed in preparing the SLA and the Review Committee is to be
>>> established in an open and bottom-up manner, as we have described in
>>>the
>>> proposal.
>>>
>>> I hope this clarifies the role of the CRISP team and RIRs in future
>>>steps.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Regards,
>>> Izumi Okutani
>>> The CRISP Team
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> -------- Forwarded Message --------
>>> Subject: Re: Next steps?
>>> Date: Thu, 22 Jan 2015 14:06:05 +0900
>>> From: Izumi Okutani <izumi at nic.ad.jp>
>>> To: Seun Ojedeji <seun.ojedeji at gmail.com>
>>> CC: ianaxfer at nro.net
>>>
>>> Hello Seun,
>>>
>>>
>>> Just from what I can answer for now,
>>>
>>>>> - SLA requirements
>>>
>>> "IANA Service Level Agreement Principles" are described in Section
>>> III.A.3 of our proposal, as you are probably aware. This lists
>>> principles and elements to be included in the SLA.
>>>
>>> Both of the processes listed below will be lead by the RIRs and not the
>>> CRISP Team. I trust the RIRs will start the process, so that we have
>>> these them ready before the transition.
>>>
>>>>> - Charter of review committee
>>>>> - Contract actual text
>>>
>>> I need to double check if there is anything more we can say at this
>>> stage as the CRISP Team - Thanks for your question and patience!
>>>
>>>
>>> Regards,
>>> Izumi
>>>
>>> On 2015/01/22 13:29, Seun Ojedeji wrote:
>>>> Hello Izumi,
>>>>
>>>> You may have missed this mail, could you/or any crisp team kindly
>>>>provide
>>>> update?
>>>>
>>>> Just to clarify (in line of recent development), not all the 3 items
>>>>are
>>>> expected to be developed by this WG but will be good to know when
>>>>those
>>>> processes will start.
>>>>
>>>> Thanks
>>>>
>>>> sent from Google nexus 4
>>>> kindly excuse brevity and typos.
>>>> On 21 Jan 2015 09:37, "Seun Ojedeji" <seun.ojedeji at gmail.com> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> Hello Izumi, CRISP team
>>>>>
>>>>> Thanks again to you and the entire team. I just want to ask about
>>>>>what the
>>>>> next line of action will be? i.e are we to wait until the ICG release
>>>>>their
>>>>> final proposal? or while we wait on ICG, we also start the drafting
>>>>>process
>>>>> for the following:
>>>>>
>>>>> - Charter of review committee
>>>>> - SLA requirements
>>>>> - Contract actual text
>>>>>
>>>>> Thanks as i look forward to your response
>>>>>
>>>>> Regards
>>>>>
>>>>> --
>>>>>
>>>>>----------------------------------------------------------------------
>>>>>-
>>>>>-
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> *Seun Ojedeji,Federal University Oye-Ekitiweb:
>>>>> http://www.fuoye.edu.ng <http://www.fuoye.edu.ng> Mobile:
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>>>>> email: <http://goog_1872880453>seun.ojedeji at fuoye.edu.ng
>>>>> <seun.ojedeji at fuoye.edu.ng>*
>>>>>
>>>>> The key to understanding is humility - my view !
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>
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