[CRISP-TEAM] Feedback before UTC14:30 Re: Draft response on the IANAXFER Fwd: Re: Next steps?

Mon Jan 26 15:37:06 CET 2015

Just a few edits for the groups consideration:

Any reference to ³require² perhaps is better changed to ³reference²?

³RIRs acknowledges this proposal which require actions by them²
to
³RIRs acknowledge this proposal which references actions by them"

and

"submitted to the ICG which require actions by the RIRs"

to
"submitted to the ICG which references actions by the RIRs"

And this reference to be slightly changed as follows:

"that necessary actions will be taken by RIRs to implement the proposal"
to

³that the RIRs will take the appropriate steps to implement the proposal"

Lastly, a couple minor style/typo edits:

"The charter of review committee and Contract actual text is the
implementation of the proposal where RIRs are responsible.²
to
³The charter of the review committee and actual contract text are part of
implementation of the proposal which is the responsibility of the RIRs²

"While our role as the CRISP Team is providing guidance to the RIRs in the
implementation, and the decision of the implementation and its
preparations is for the RIRs to make"
To
³While our role as the CRISP team is to provide guidance to the RIRs in
the implementation of the proposal, the details and process of
implementation of the proposal is the responsibility of the RIRs.

"RIRs to make, the CRISP Team believe it is important²
to
³Šresponsibility of the RIRs.(edit from above) The CRISP Team believes it
is important...²  (breaking into separate sentence and adding ³s² to
believe)

"We trust the RIRs will consult with relevant community as needed in
preparing the SLA²
to
³We trust each RIR will consult with their respective communities as
needed in preparing the SLA²

Just a few of my thoughts.

Thanks,
-Michael

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On 1/26/15, 6:38 AM, "Izumi Okutani" <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:

>CRISP Team,
>
>
>For this as well, I will wait until UTC14:30 today Jan 26th for feedback
>before sending this out.
>
>Please let me know if you have any concerns/suggestions for changes or
>would like me to hold sending it at above time, so you have more time to
>review.
>
>
>
>Thanks,
>Izumi
>
>
>On 2015/01/24 2:10, Izumi Okutani wrote:
>> CRISP Team,
>> 
>> 
>> Please see my draft response to the IANAXFER list regarding the next
>>steps.
>> 
>> I tried to incorporate our discussions in "Future steps and
>> communicating with RIRs" thread, and welcome any feedback or
>> clarifications you may have.
>> 
>> Before I send this out, I do wish to hear especially from RIR staff who
>> are the CRISP Team members, in case this description about our
>> expections from the RIRs causes any issues or concerns for the RIRs.
>> 
>> 
>> Thanks,
>> Izumi
>> 
>> 
>> ----
>> Hello Seun and colleagues on the IANAXFER list,
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> Thank you once again Seun for your question about the next steps.
>> I think this is a useful question for others in the community as well.
>> 
>> As you are aware, our proposal to the ICG describes high level
>> principles about the Review Committee and the SLA including "IANA
>> Service Level Agreement Principles" in the proposal, so RIRs will
>> consider implementation based on this guidance.
>> 
>> The charter of review committee and Contract actual text is the
>> implementation of the proposal where RIRs are responsible.
>> 
>> While our role as the CRISP Team is providing guidance to the RIRs in
>> the implementation, and the decision of the implementation and its
>> preparations is for the RIRs to make, the CRISP Team believe it is
>> important for the community to have clear visibility that RIRs
>> acknowledges this proposal which require actions by them.
>> 
>> Therefore, after Step2 of the ICG's latest timeline, when the proposals
>> by all three operational communities are consolidated by the ICG, the
>> CRISP Team plans to formally inform the executives of the RIRs about the
>> proposal submitted to the ICG which require actions by the RIRs.
>> 
>>   
>>https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/icg-process-timeline-07jan15-
>>en.pdf
>> 
>> We expect that there will be formal acknowledgement from the five RIRs
>> about this, so it is clear to the community that necessary actions will
>> be taken by RIRs to implement the proposal from the Number Resources
>> community. We trust the RIRs will consult with relevant community as
>> needed in preparing the SLA and the Review Committee is to be
>> established in an open and bottom-up manner, as we have described in the
>> proposal.
>> 
>> I hope this clarifies the role of the CRISP team and RIRs in future
>>steps.
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> Regards,
>> Izumi Okutani
>> The CRISP Team
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> -------- Forwarded Message --------
>> Subject: Re: Next steps?
>> Date: Thu, 22 Jan 2015 14:06:05 +0900
>> From: Izumi Okutani <izumi at nic.ad.jp>
>> To: Seun Ojedeji <seun.ojedeji at gmail.com>
>> CC: ianaxfer at nro.net
>> 
>> Hello Seun,
>> 
>> 
>> Just from what I can answer for now,
>> 
>>>> - SLA requirements
>> 
>> "IANA Service Level Agreement Principles" are described in Section
>> III.A.3 of our proposal, as you are probably aware. This lists
>> principles and elements to be included in the SLA.
>> 
>> Both of the processes listed below will be lead by the RIRs and not the
>> CRISP Team. I trust the RIRs will start the process, so that we have
>> these them ready before the transition.
>> 
>>>> - Charter of review committee
>>>> - Contract actual text
>> 
>> I need to double check if there is anything more we can say at this
>> stage as the CRISP Team - Thanks for your question and patience!
>> 
>> 
>> Regards,
>> Izumi
>> 
>> On 2015/01/22 13:29, Seun Ojedeji wrote:
>>> Hello Izumi,
>>>
>>> You may have missed this mail, could you/or any crisp team kindly
>>>provide
>>> update?
>>>
>>> Just to clarify (in line of recent development), not all the 3 items
>>>are
>>> expected to be developed by this WG but will be good to know when those
>>> processes will start.
>>>
>>> Thanks
>>>
>>> sent from Google nexus 4
>>> kindly excuse brevity and typos.
>>> On 21 Jan 2015 09:37, "Seun Ojedeji" <seun.ojedeji at gmail.com> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Hello Izumi, CRISP team
>>>>
>>>> Thanks again to you and the entire team. I just want to ask about
>>>>what the
>>>> next line of action will be? i.e are we to wait until the ICG release
>>>>their
>>>> final proposal? or while we wait on ICG, we also start the drafting
>>>>process
>>>> for the following:
>>>>
>>>> - Charter of review committee
>>>> - SLA requirements
>>>> - Contract actual text
>>>>
>>>> Thanks as i look forward to your response
>>>>
>>>> Regards
>>>>
>>>> --
>>>> 
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>>>>-
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> *Seun Ojedeji,Federal University Oye-Ekitiweb:
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>>>> email: <http://goog_1872880453>seun.ojedeji at fuoye.edu.ng
>>>> <seun.ojedeji at fuoye.edu.ng>*
>>>>
>>>> The key to understanding is humility - my view !
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> 
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