[CRISP-TEAM] Comment deadline UTC2030 e: Version 8 clean and redline

[Alan Barrett]

On Thu, 15 Jan 2015, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>> On 2015/01/16 5:03, Alan Barrett wrote:
>>> III.A.3.  says "the NTIA has no oversight role in IANA Numbering
>>> Services".  Is that accurate?  The previous vesion qualified it as no
>>> oversight role "in policy-making", not no oversight role at all.  I
>>> don't know the answer.
>>
>> Alan, I had the same question and was wondering where this changes is
>> coming from.
>>
>> It is talking about policy and I suggest bring the change back.
 [...]

> Saying "the NTIA's has no oversight role in IANA Numbering 
> Services" is incorrect. So our review suggested removing it from 
> there entirely:
>
> New text:
> "The ASO MoU is an agreement between the Internet Number 
> Community and ICANN; the NTIA's transition out of its current 
> role would have no effect on the policy-making framework."
>
> Does this make sense?

That's OK, but I prefer my text, which is closer to the original:

    The ASO MoU is an agreement between the Internet Number
    Community and ICANN; the NTIA has no oversight role in
    policy-making for IANA Numbering Services, and its transition
    out of its current role would have no effect on the
    policy-making framework.

--apb (Alan Barrett)