[CRISP-TEAM] Comment deadline UTC2030 e: Version 8 clean and redline

[Izumi Okutani]

On 2015/01/16 5:36, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
> 
> On 15 jan 2015, at 21:31, Izumi Okutani <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:
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>> On 2015/01/16 5:03, Alan Barrett wrote:
>>> III.A.3.  says "the NTIA has no oversight role in IANA Numbering
>>> Services".  Is that accurate?  The previous vesion qualified it as no
>>> oversight role "in policy-making", not no oversight role at all.  I
>>> don't know the answer.
>>
>> Alan, I had the same question and was wondering where this changes is
>> coming from.
>>
>> It is talking about policy and I suggest bring the change back.
> 
> The version 8 by Bill said:
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> "The ASO MoU is an agreement between the Internet Number Community and ICANN; the NTIA's has no oversight role in IANA Numbering Services, and its transition out of its current role would have no effect on the policy-making framework."
> 
> But this is not correct. As Alan points out, there was something in there before about oversight role in "policy-making", which must have disappeared at some stage.
> 
> Saying "the NTIA's has no oversight role in IANA Numbering Services" is incorrect. So our review suggested removing it from there entirely:
> 
> New text:
> "The ASO MoU is an agreement between the Internet Number Community and ICANN; the NTIA's transition out of its current role would have no effect on the policy-making framework."
> 
> Does this make sense?
> Nurani

yes. I saw that in your version and was about to post.
It works for me.

So Michael, you just need to reflect Nurani's word .

Izumi