[CRISP-TEAM] Comment deadline UTC2030 e: Version 8 clean and redline
apb at cequrux.com
Thu Jan 15 21:03:56 CET 2015
On Fri, 16 Jan 2015, Izumi Okutani wrote:
>Please give your comment before UTC 2030.
I have reviewed the changes from version 7 to version 8, and I
have the following comments:
I.B last sentence, please change "IANA Number Registry System"
to "Internet Number Registry System" for consistency with RFC
7020. This was correct in version 7. The same error appears in
several other places in the document so it needs global search and
replace "IANA Number Registry System" -> "Internet Number Registry
System". The glossary has the correct term, "Internet Number
Note that "IANA Number Registries" is correct, but when you add
"System", then it's "Internet Number Registry System" (which
includes the IANA, the RIRs, and NIRs in countries that have
III.A.3. says "the NTIA has no oversight role in IANA Numbering
Services". Is that accurate? The previous vesion qualified it
as no oversight role "in policy-making", not no oversight role at
all. I don't know the answer.
III.A.3 says "Via the ASO, the three members from each RIR region
have been participating in the periodic independent reviews by the
Accountability and Transparency Review Team (ATRT) that are called
for in ICANN’s Bylaws." The previous text sais "Via the ASO,
the RIRs have been participating ...". The old text was accurate,
and the new text is inaccurate. It's true that three members
from each RIR region are members of the ASO AC, but not all theee
members participate in ATRT reviews.
II.B.3.i "ICANN, as the current IANA Numbering Services Operator,
is obligated by the NTIA agreement to manage of the IANA Number
Registries according to policies developed by the Internet Number
Community." Please delete "of".
III.A.3 "The agreement should also require the IANA Numbering
Services Operator to appropriately coordinate with any other
operator of IANA Numbering Services." I think we want them to
coordinate with any other operator of IANA services. For example,
if numbers and protocol parameters are handled by different
contractors, they should coordinate with each other.
--apb (Alan Barrett)
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