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[Nurani Nimpuno]

> On 15 jan 2015, at 13:06, Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com> wrote:
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>> On Thu, 15 Jan 2015, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>> I have made the changes directly in the document for easier review.
> 
> I support all Nurani's changes, but in section IV.B, I suggest writing "essentially a Service Level Agreement for the IANA Numbering Services" instead of "essentially an IANA Numbering Services Service Level Agreement".  I think that the juxtaposition of "Services" and "Service" makes the sentence dissicult to read.

Agreed. I support Alan's improvement. 

Nurani

> 
> --apb (Alan Barrett)