[CRISP-TEAM] Interim version, not yet checked visually in Word...

[Bill Woodcock]

> On Jan 15, 2015, at 4:06 AM, Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com> wrote:
> 
> On Thu, 15 Jan 2015, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>> I have made the changes directly in the document for easier review.
> 
> I support all Nurani's changes, but in section IV.B, I suggest writing "essentially a Service Level Agreement for the IANA Numbering Services" instead of "essentially an IANA Numbering Services Service Level Agreement".  I think that the juxtaposition of "Services" and "Service" makes the sentence dissicult to read.

Very much agreed.  And thank you for the solution.  I’ll apply it now.

Oops.  We have duplication between III.A.3 and IV.B.  I’ve resolved in favor of the former.

                                -Bill




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