[CRISP-TEAM] Interim version, not yet checked visually in Word...

Alan Barrett apb at cequrux.com
Thu Jan 15 13:06:23 CET 2015

On Thu, 15 Jan 2015, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>I have made the changes directly in the document for easier review.

I support all Nurani's changes, but in section IV.B, I suggest 
writing "essentially a Service Level Agreement for the IANA 
Numbering Services" instead of "essentially an IANA Numbering 
Services Service Level Agreement".  I think that the juxtaposition 
of "Services" and "Service" makes the sentence dissicult to read.

--apb (Alan Barrett)

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