[CRISP-TEAM] IANA Draft Proposal 14012015 - MRA

[Izumi Okutani]

Thank you Alan,

I'm sorry that your suggested changes which reached consensus was not 
captured. Must have been due to my notes to Michael which was missing in 
those parts.

I do strongly recommend other CRISP Team to do the same, as I did my 
best to cover based on what I could catch up but it is likely I have not 
captured them all, especially when there was not a lot of discussions.

 > Finally, I think we still need to update section VI.I to ensure that it
 > captures all recent discussions.  See items 9 and 10 in this email 
message:
 >

Indeed. I looked at this myself before the call yesterday for the same 
reason. My personaly impression was it still doesn't seem to change this 
general description that there was consensus on the proposed elements, 
with discussions on details.

It may perpaps worth considering to list the issues which had some 
discussions such as dispute resolution, details of SLA, while I didn't 
observe disagreement at the end, from my perspective.

Izumi

On 2015/01/15 8:23, Alan Barrett wrote:
> On Wed, 14 Jan 2015, Michael Abejuela wrote:
>> My apologies, I anticipated getting this out an hour earlier. Please
>> find attached a redline and clean version of the updates to the draft
>> proposal.  In this draft you will observe the changes identified in
>> Izumi���s e-mail ���Compilation of Sugested texts ��� issues discussed
>> at the 11th call��� and Izumi���s e-mail earlier today ���To Michael:
>> Suggested changes to be reflected���
>
> Thank you.  I have a few comments:
>
> Section I.B: "The RIRs, not-for-profit membership-based
> organizations, manage ...".  This is missing the "with elected governing
> boards" that was present in another section.  This section is also
> missing the definitions of "NRO" and "NRO EC" that I suggested should be
> moved to this section, and that I thought received agreement.  See the
> email thread "Move description of RIRs, NRO, and NRO EC to section I.A"
> in which I provided a redline file draft-apb-NROEC-RIR.20150113.1.docx
> with suggested edits.
>
> Section III.A.2: The sentence "It is the preference of the RIR community
> that all relevant parties agree to these expectations as part of the
> transition" appears twice, buth in a paragraph near the middle, and in a
> sentence at the end of the last paragraph.
>
> Section III.A.3: "It is expected that RIR staff, as the contractual
> party of this agreement, will draft the specific language of this
> agreement." I thought we agreed that "the RIRs", not "RIR staff", would
> draft the contract.  Also, could we say "contract" instead of
> "agreement" here?
>
> * Section III.A.4: I think we agreed that "The RIRs shall establish a
> Review Committee".
>
>
> I also found several changes that I proposed, that received consensus,
> but that have not been integrated.  I did not look for similar cases on
> behalf of others.
>
> * Email thread "Document status inside the document", my redline file
> draft-apb-STATUS.20150113.1.redline.docx from the email message
> with these headers:
>
>     Date: Tue, 13 Jan 2015 12:36:28 +0200
>     From: Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com>
>     To: crisp at nro.net
>     Subject: Re: [CRISP-TEAM] Document status inside the document
>
> * Email thread "Change NRO EC to RIRs", my suggestions in the message
> with these email headers,
>     Date: Tue, 13 Jan 2015 11:25:27 +0200
>     From: Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com>
>     To: crisp at nro.net
>     Subject: [CRISP-TEAM] Change NRO EC to RIRs
>
> as modified by Paul Rendek's commens in this email message:
>
>     Date: Tue, 13 Jan 2015 10:54:39 +0000
>     From: Paul Rendek <rendek at ripe.net>
>     To: crisp at nro.net
>     Subject: Re: [CRISP-TEAM] Change NRO EC to RIRs
>
> * Emaill thread "Move description of RIRs, NRO, and NRO EC to section I.A",
> my redline file draft-apb-NROEC-RIR.20150113.1.docx from this email
> message:
>
>     Date: Tue, 13 Jan 2015 12:04:15 +0200
>     From: Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com>
>     To: crisp at nro.net
>     Subject: [CRISP-TEAM] Move description of RIRs, NRO, and NRO EC to
>      section I.A
>
> modified by changing "associations" to "organizations".
>
>
> Finally, I think we still need to update section VI.I to ensure that it
> captures all recent discussions.  See items 9 and 10 in this email message:
>
>     Date: Mon, 12 Jan 2015 10:26:00 +0200
>     From: Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com>
>     To: crisp at nro.net
>     Subject: [CRISP-TEAM] Editorial suggestions
>
> --apb (Alan Barrett)
>
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