[CRISP-TEAM] [NRO-IANAXFER] Thanks, and comments on the second draft proposal

[Alan Barrett]

On Tue, 13 Jan 2015, Bill Woodcock wrote:
>>>> PW's comment: "It is incorrect that an identical version must 
>>>> be approved by all RIRs."
>>>> ~~~~
>>>>
>>>> If this indeed is incorrect, it will need to be 
>>>> corrected. Can we seek clarification on this?
>>
>> I am a member of the ASO AC.  Global policy proposals have 
>> almost always been slightly different in different RIRs.  There 
>> have been differences in section numbering, punctuation, 
>> spelling, and even small differences in wording.  One of the 
>> steps is for the RIR staff to prepare a common version, which 
>> is the one sent to ICANN and the IANA operator.
>
> We should be accurate, or we should be concise.  One option is 
> to correct the text that’s there, the other is to elide it.  
> It sounds like it can’t be left to stand as-is.
>
> My vote is to elide.  We don’t need to explain the whole world 
> in this document, and it’s overlong already.

I think Paul Wilson's text addresses this point.  We can just keep his
text, which removes the word "identical".


>
>>> A.2.
>>> It is the preference of the RIR communities that all relevant 
>>> parties acknowledge that fact as part of the transition.
>>>
>>> Comment from PW:
>>> "It is not clear which fact is referred to here."
>>
>> It should be "these facts", and it refers to the facts from the 
>> preceding paragraphs.
>
> Well, if it’s unclear to someone, it may be unclear to others, 
> and if they’re in a different paragraph, saying so may help.

The current draft says:

    It is important that through the stewardship transition
    the IPR status of the registries is clear and ensures
    free unlimited access to the public registry data. It is
    the expectation of the Internet community that the IANA
    Numbers Registries are in the public domain.

    It is also the expectation of the RIR community that
    non-public information related to the IANA number resource
    registries and corresponding services, including the
    provision of reverse DNS delegation in IN-ADDR.ARPA
    and IP6.ARPA, is managed by the IANA operator and will
    be transferred to its successor(s) along with relevant
    rights.

    It is the preference of the RIR community that all
    relevant parties acknowledge these facts as part of the
    transition.

Perhaps it would help to change "acknowledge these facts"
to "agrees to these expectations".

--apb (Alan Barrett)