[CRISP-TEAM] Change NRO EC to RIRs

[Paul Rendek]

Hello Alan,

Thanks for going through the doc to find these instances. I have
included my comment inline below.

I wanted to ask whether you also scanned the doc to find instances where
we noted 'NRO' where it may be more appropriate to use 'RIR'. I think
this also needs to be done.

On 1/13/15 9:25 AM, Alan Barrett wrote:
> I have reviewed the use ofthe term NRO EC.  It appears in the following
> places:
>
> II.A.2, about the gPDP:
>
>    Any individual may submit a global policy proposal which must
>    be agreed by all five RIR communities, in accordance with their
>    respective policy development processes. The NRO Executive Council
>    (“NRO EC”) then refers the coordinated proposal to the Address
>    Supporting Organization Address Council (“ASO AC”), which
>    reviews the process by which the proposal was developed and, under
>    the terms of the ASO Memorandum of Understanding (“ASO MoU”),
>    passes it to the ICANN Board of Directors for ratification as a
>    global policy.
>
> I think that "NRO EC" is correct here.
I agree

>
> III.A, listing the elements of the proposal:
>
>    (4) Establishment of a Review Committee, with representatives from
>    each RIR, to advise the NRO EC on the review of the IANA Numbering
>    Services Operator’s performance and meeting of identified service
>    levels.
>
> I think that "NRO EC" is correct here.

I agree
>
> III.A.1, last paragraph:
>
>    While there are no concrete needs or plans at this point, the NRO
>    EC may in the future determine that the IANA Numbering Services
>    should be transferred to a different contractor. In such a case,
>    selection of a new contractor shall be conducted in a fair, open and
>    transparent process, in line with applicable industry best practices
>    and standards.
>
> I suggest changing that to "the RIRs, acting through the NRO EC, may in
> future ...".
I think its better as:

"the RIRs, may in future... "

I don't think the addition of "acting through the NRO EC" adds anyting
here. I would suggest to leave this out.


>
> III.A.4, Establishment of a Review Committee, first paragraph
>
>    To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract
>    is maintained and provided by the IANA Numbering Services
>    Operator, the NRO EC will conduct periodic reviews of the
>    service level of the IANA Numbering Services provided to each
>    RIR and their respective communities.
>
> I think that "NRO EC" is correct here.

I agree
>
> III.A.4, Establishment of a Review Committee, second paragraph
>
>    The NRO EC shall establish a Review Committee that will advise and
>    assist the NRO EC in its periodic review. The Review Committee will,
>    as needed, undertake a review of the level of service received from
>    the IANA Numbering Services Operator and report to the NRO EC any
>    concerns regarding the performance of the IANA Numbering Services
>    Operator, including especially any observed failure or near-failure
>    by the IANA Numbering Services Operator to meet its contractual
>    obligations under the proposed contract. Any such Review Committee
>    will advise the NRO EC in its capacity solely to oversee the
>    performance of the IANA Numbering Services and the Review
>    Committee’s advice and comment will be limited to the processes
>    followed in the IANA Numbering Services Operator’s performance under
>    the proposed contract. Activities of the Review Committee shall be
>    conducted in an open and transparent manner. Reports from the Review
>    Committee shall be published.
>
>
> I suggest changing the first instance of "NRO EC" to "RIRs", like this:
>
>    The RIRs shall establish a Review Committee that will advise and
>    assist the NRO EC in its periodic review.
>
> and leaving all other instances of "NRO EC" in this paragraph unchanged.

I agree

>
> IV.A, description of operational requirements to achieve continuity
>
>    Under current arrangements, the NTIA is responsible for
>    extending or renewing the IANA functions agreement, and
>    setting the terms of that contract. A new contract with
>    the five RIRs and the IANA Numbering Services Operator as
>    signatories would shift the responsibility for renewing,
>    setting terms or terminating the contract to the RIRs,
>    who would coordinate their decisions via the NRO EC (made
>    up of appointed representative of each RIR, normally the
>    CEOs). Decisions made regarding the contract would be based
>    on operational circumstances, past performance and input from
>    open, regional communities.
>
> I think that the uses of RIRs and NRO EC are correct here.
>
> However, I suggest moving the description of how the NRO EC is "made
> up of appointed representative of each RIR, normally the
> CEOs" to section I.B "A description of the customer(s) of the service or
> activity".  I will propose text in a separate message.
Yes, I agree

>
> IV.C Risks to operational continuity
>
>    This proposal does not propose any new technical or operational
>    methods. There is inclusion of a proposed Review Committee to be
>    established by the five RIRs acting cooperatively and coordinating
>    through the NRO EC; however, this does not carry any new operational
>    method as the IANA functions operator would remain accountable to
>    the party with whom it is contracting, in this case, the five RIRs
>    in place of the NTIA. The proposed Review Committee is a tool for
>    the five RIRs to, together with their respective communities
>    collectively, evaluate and review performance of the IANA functions
>    provided.
>
> I think that the uses of RIRs and NRO EC are correct here.

I agree
>
> VI.G. Global Internet Numbers Community Process
>
>    On 16 October 2014, the NRO EC proposed the formation of the CRISP
>    Team ...
>
> This use of "NRO EC" is correct.

I agree

Thanks,
Paul
>
>
> --apb (Alan Barrett)
>
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