[CRISP-TEAM] Suggested Text - III.A.3 (consultation with the community)

[Alan Barrett]

On Tue, 13 Jan 2015, Andrei Robachevsky wrote:
>Here is a suggested addition to the text in order to reflect the
>expectation of the community that the RIRs will consult the community
>when developing the SLAs. We believe that the concerns raised by people
>on the ianaxfer related to some specific details of dispute resolution
>and applicable law come from the fear that this is the last opportunity
>for the community to voice their opinion. The additional statement is
>aimed to assure this is not the case.

I support that description of the rationale for the change.

>OLD:
>
>It is expected that RIR staff will draft the specific language of this
>agreement, and that the drafting process will be guided by the
>principles listed below. References to relevant sections of the current
>NTIA agreement are also noted, as it is expected the new agreement will
>share many of the same contractual goals and mechanisms.
>
>NEW:
>
>It is expected that RIR staff will draft the specific language of this
>agreement. During the drafting process RIR staff is expected to consult
>the RIR communities.  The drafting process will be guided by the
>principles listed below. References to relevant sections of the current
>NTIA agreement are also noted, as it is expected the new agreement will
>share many of the same contractual goals and mechanisms.

Perhaps say "RIR staff and legal teams will draft the specific language"
(add "legal teams"), and "RIR staff are expected to consult the RIR
communities" (is -> are).

--apb (Alan Barrett)