[CRISP-TEAM] Editorial suggestions

[Izumi Okutani]

Thank you Michael, Alan and Bill.

To to share the list of people who have made editorical suggestions, 
based on my memory.


on CRISP ML
  - Alan Barett, Bill Woodcock, Mwendwa Kivuva, Niall(through Nurani),
    Pindar Wong (through Izumi)
  - myself (Izumi Okutani): See word attachment for the specific changes
   "A few formating changes to Section III"

on IANAXFER list
  - Wilfred Woeber
  - Paul Wilson

Thanks,
Izumi


On 2015/01/13 1:22, Michael Abejuela wrote:
> Thank you Alan and Bill for working with me on this.  In response to your
> e-mail Alan, please see below:
>
> (1)	Yes you are correct, that is the document and the most recent one I
> sent to you I apologize had the same file name but the only change was the
> metadata change.
>
> (2)	Bill, I know you are out of pocket with the Board meeting and travel
> immediately afterwards.  Alan, if you provide me your edits with track
> changes, I can work on combining the edits into a master document.  Then
> you can get some much needed and deserved rest!
>
> (3)	I do have a prior commitment that will take me offline from 22:00 UTC
> to 02:00 UTC but can combine the edits after that.  I anticipate being
> able to complete the combination by 03:00 UTC.
>
> (4)	I can then circulate to both of Alan and Bill, and Bill, if you can do
> a �copyedit� (and any other editorial changes we may have missed) pass,
> that would be great.
>
> (5)	To keep consistent with the process that has been in place, Bill, once
> you have done your copyedit pass, could you send to me and Alan and then I
> will finalize with clean and redline versions as well as various formats
> for both posting on the IANAXFER list and providing to German for website
> updates.
>
> I agree, we do need two copyedit rounds (1) editorial and (2) substantive
> as this is what was agreed on the call today.  Have I missed anything and
> does this work for everyone?
>
> Thanks,
> -Michael
>