[CRISP-TEAM] A few formating changes to Section III

[Izumi Okutani]

CRISP Team,


As I raised in an e-mail post and at the call yesterday, I'd like to
suggest 3 formatting changes to Section III.

It does not change any text/contents

The reason why I think is important is, it should be easy to capture the
core elements of our proposal in Section III.

I feel the 2nd draft is more difficult to capture this, as we added
details into our proposal, while it was improved in our published draft
to some extent by deleting details of Review Commitee.

I don't want to add too much on our plate as we have issues to dicuss
our position but if it's not controversial, it is my preference to
address this.

What are your thoughts?
Please let me know especially if you have concerns.




Proposed changes: (See attached word file for redline)

 1. Move the paragraph which describes how the proposal is positioned
    with other function, under III A. from III A3
     - It looks like general principles for all elements not just SLA
     - Slims SLA part with the core of what it proposes

 2. Move the sentence "The Internet numbering community proposes that a
    new contract be established between the IANA functions operator and
    the five RIRs."
     - Easier to capture the proposal by describing what we propose in
       early paragraph

 3. Lower indent for "IANA Agreement Principles" part
     - To Highlight the overview of SLA proposed element
     - Easier to keep in mind about 4 proposed elements without getting
       lost into details of SLA points.



Regards,
Izumi
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