[CRISP-TEAM] 2ND CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft - Updated 1440UTC
Michael Abejuela
mabejuela at arin.net
Thu Jan 8 16:17:13 CET 2015
Hi Nurani,
Acknowledged and will reflect in the final draft.
Thanks!
-Michael
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On 1/8/15, 10:13 AM, "Nurani Nimpuno" <nurani at netnod.se> wrote:
>Thank you very much for the updated version Michael! Excellent work.
>
>One minor correction:
>
>"III.A. The elements of this proposal are as follows:
>(1) ICANN to continue as the IANA functions operator on number resources;
>(2) Intellectual property rights (IPR) related to the provision of the
>IANA services stay with the community;
>(3) Contract and service level agreement with the IANA functions
>operator on"
>
>Replace last bullet with:
>"(3) Service level agreement with the IANA functions operator on"
>
>(Comment: I note that you remove the "Contract and" later in the text in
>the title "III.A.3. Service level agreement with the IANA functions
>operator on number resources", so this is just tidying that up so it
>matches.)
>
>Thanks,
>
>Nurani
>
>
>
>
>
>On 8 jan 2015, at 15:41, Michael Abejuela <mabejuela at arin.net> wrote:
>
>> Hello everyone,
>>
>> Thank you again for those who hopped on the last minute call today, it
>>was very helpful logistically as I compiled all the comments and most
>>recent edits.
>>
>> Please find attached a clean and redline version of the most updated
>>2nd Draft Proposal. In these documents, you will observe the following
>>changes I made as compared to the last version of the 2nd draft. Please
>>let me know if I have missed anything or you see any further edits to be
>>incorporated. I have a couple of comments on drafting at the end of the
>>email below. I look forward to your feedback.
>>
>> Edits incorporated:
>>
>> I.A. - including text of ³maintenance of the global Internet number
>>resource registriesŠ²
>>
>> I.C. Provision of reverse DNS services in ³IN-ADDR.ARPA² and
>>³IP6.ARPA² domains may also require interaction with the .ARPA zone
>>registry.
>>
>> II.B.2 revision to section ³ICANN has historically provided IANA
>>serviceŠ"
>>
>> III.A.3 removed ³Contract and²
>>
>> III.A.3 revised ³following principles² to ³principles listed below²
>>
>> III.A.3 included text to the preamble immediately preceding the
>>principles section "While there are no concrete needs or plans at this
>>point, the NRO EC may in the future determine that the IANA functions
>>related to number resources should be transferred to a different
>>contractor.²
>>
>> III.A.3 removal of text ³jurisdiction will be dependent on the chosen
>>IANA functions operator"
>>
>> III.A.3.ii revision as suggested
>>
>> ii. Description of Serviced Provided by the IANA Operator to RIRs
>>
>> Principle:
>> The IANA Operator will maintain the global Internet number resource
>>registries. The IANA Operator will distribute Internet number Resources
>>to the RIRs in accordance with the specific processes and timelines
>>described in this section of the agreement. The IANA Operator will
>>delegate subdomains below the IN-ADDR.ARPA and IP6.ARPA domains in
>>accordance with the allocation of IPv4 and IPv6 addresses.
>>
>> III.A.4 Review committee text reflects Alan¹s most current text edit
>>circulated by e-mail
>>
>> V.E revised per Nurani¹s suggestion clarification ³This proposal
>>does not replaceŠ.²
>>
>> VI regional process formatting updates suggested by Nurani - (AFRINIC
>>³setup² to ³set up²; removal of hard breaks)
>> -also, removed the timeline graphic and revised text immediately below
>>to reflect substance of the timeline graphic in text form. Much of it
>>was already covered by LACNIC but I supplemented with specific time
>>duration references to capture the spirit of the graphic.
>>
>>
>> *Please note that I made the edit as agreed for the reference to
>>³IN-ADDR.ARPA² and ³IP6.ARPA² in I.C.; however, I note that there are
>>other references in the document to ³IN-ADDR.ARPA² and ³IP6.ARPA² - I
>>have not made any revisions to those references as those were not
>>discussed but I wanted to raise the issue in case any edits to maintain
>>consistency are needed for those as well.
>>
>> Also, not taken up in this draft, we can clean up hyperlinks and
>>references/footnotes for the final draft. I am happy to do so, but
>>there was not enough time to incorporate in this draft.
>>
>> Thanks,
>> -Michael
>>
>>
>> --
>> Michael R. Abejuela
>> Associate General Counsel
>> ARIN
>> 3635 Concorde Parkway
>> Suite 200
>> Chantilly, VA 20151
>> (703) 227-9875 (p)
>> (703) 263-0111 (f)
>> mabejuela at arin.net
>>
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>> From: Michael Abejuela <mabejuela at arin.net>
>> Date: Thursday, January 8, 2015 at 8:02 AM
>> To: "crisp at nro.net" <crisp at nro.net>
>> Subject: [CRISP-TEAM] 2ND CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft - Update
>>
>> Team,
>>
>> I am combing through the email correspondence and so far have edited
>>the 2nd proposal draft as follows:
>>
>> Changes made:
>>
>> I.C. Provision of reverse DNS services in ³IN-ADDR.ARPA² and
>>³IP6.ARPA² domains may also require interaction with the .ARPA zone
>>registry.
>>
>> Is a change to ii. Description of Serviced Provided by the IANA
>>Operator to RIRs also required for consistency?
>>
>> II.B.2 revision to section ³ICANN has historically provided IANA
>>serviceŠ"
>>
>> III.A.3 removed ³Contract and²
>>
>> III.A.3 revised ³following principles² to ³principles listed below²
>>
>> III.A.3 included text to the preamble immediately preceding the
>>principles section "While there are no concrete needs or plans at this
>>point, the NRO EC may in the future determine that the IANA functions
>>related to number resources should be transferred to a different
>>contractor.²
>>
>> III.A.3.ii revision as suggested
>>
>> ii. Description of Serviced Provided by the IANA Operator to RIRs
>>
>> Principle:
>> The IANA Operator will maintain the global Internet number resource
>>registries. The IANA Operator will distribute Internet number Resources
>>to the RIRs in accordance with the specific processes and timelines
>>described in this section of the agreement. The IANA Operator will
>>delegate subdomains below the IN-ADDR.ARPA and IP6.ARPA domains in
>>accordance with the allocation of IPv4 and IPv6 addresses.
>>
>> V.E revised per Nurani¹s suggestion clarification ³This proposal
>>does not replaceŠ.²
>>
>> VI regional process formatting updates suggested by Nurani - (AFRINIC
>>³setup² to ³set up²; removal of hard breaks)
>> -also, removed the timeline graphic and revised text immediately below
>>to reflect substance of the timeline graphic in text form. Much of it
>>was already covered by LACNIC but I supplemented with specific time
>>duration references to capture the spirit of the graphic.
>>
>> Open Items
>>
>> Any agreement on modifications to the Review Committee text?
>>
>> Should we remove the jurisdiction text as suggested by Paul?
>>
>>
>> Please let me know if I¹ve missed anything on the call. I am hopping
>>on now.
>>
>> Thanks!
>> -Michael
>>
>> --
>> Michael R. Abejuela
>> Associate General Counsel
>> ARIN
>> 3635 Concorde Parkway
>> Suite 200
>> Chantilly, VA 20151
>> (703) 227-9875 (p)
>> (703) 263-0111 (f)
>> mabejuela at arin.net
>>
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