[CRISP-TEAM] 2ND CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft - CRISP Review

[Alan Barrett]

On Thu, 08 Jan 2015, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>III.A.3.
>
> "Contract and Service level agreement with the IANA functions 
> operator on number resources"
>
>Replace with:
> "Service level agreement with the IANA functions operator on 
> number resources"
>
> (Comment: I don't know how the "Contract and" snuck in here as 
> it wasn't in the final text. But I strongly suggest we remove it 
> as it might give the impression that we are talking about two 
> things, a contract and an SLA agreement".)

I added the word "Contract" in one of my edits.  I am happy for it to be
removed.

>III.A.3.
>(Comment: Instead of "following principles", "principles listed below".)

I agree.

>V.E The proposal must not replace the NTIA role with a government-led
>or an inter-governmental oranization solution
>
>   "This proposal will place the RIRs in the role currently occupied
>    by NTIA."
>
>Replace with:
>   "This proposal does not replace the NTIA role with a government-led
>    or an inter-governmental oranization solution. This proposal will
>    place the RIRs in the role currently occupied by NTIA."
>
>(Comment: Simply to add clarity. But I do not feel strongly about this.)

I strongly support this change.

I also support the other changes Nurani mentioned (but which I did 
not quote).

--apb (Alan Barrett)