[CRISP-TEAM] 2ND CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft - CRISP Review

[Izumi Okutani]

On 2015/01/08 17:58, Alan Barrett wrote:
> On Thu, 08 Jan 2015, Michael Abejuela wrote:
>> I also proposed a numbering scheme that may or may not seem awkward to 
>> some but appreciate any feedback on this item as well.
> 
> Your numbering scheme is fine.  I usually prefer hierarchical arabic 
> numbers, like "1.2.3", but the RFP that we had to work from already uses 
> roman and alphabetic numbering for the first two levels, so we have to 
> stick with that.

Agreed. I just made one comment related to this, for Section III.

> I might prefer to break long sub-sections into smaller sub-sub-sections 
> with another level of numbering, but that's not critical.
> 
>> One editorial item I did incorporate but ask for your comment or 
>> approval is in the section now labeled II.B.3.ii Regional Internet 
>> Registries ��� second paragraph, last sentence where I have removed 
>> ���specific funding or operational resolutions��� and in its place put 
>> ���matters related to the respective RIR.���  I made this language 
>> more general to be in line with my understanding of all the RIRs and 
>> to avoid any confusion that there are specific funding or operational 
>> resolutions for which members cast votes on a regular basis.
> 
> That's fine.
Yes. Fine by me as well.

>> p.s.  One item I recall there being a removal of text had to do with 
>> the discussion of the issue of how detailed provisions about the 
>> contract would be included but I did not remove any such text.  It may 
>> have already been addressed in the edits but I wanted to confirm with 
>> the team just in case.  Thanks.
> 
> I am not sure which text you are referring to.

This is already incorporated as a part of text suggestion from Paul and
Nurani.

That's my understanding at least, and please correct me if I'm wrong
Paul and Nurani.


Izumi