[CRISP-TEAM] Comment requested : Handling of Editorial changes needed

[Alan Barrett]

On Thu, 08 Jan 2015, Izumi Okutani wrote:
> Michael has reflected all text changes suggested.
>
> However, from looking at the whole proposal, I got the 
> impression that it was difficult to catch the essence of our 
> proposal elements in Section III, as we added more details to 
> each of the elements.
>
> I strongly feel it's important we address this before we submit 
> to the ICG , as we should be clear and understanable about what 
> we are proposing.
>
> On the other hand, we may be too short of time to do this work 
> before our target at UTC13:00 8th Jan.
>
> My suggestion is, release this draft based on Michael's draft 
> and follow up with edited version, as we did for the first 
> proposal.

I have three substantive comments, which I will share in separate 
email, and which I would like to be addressed before this draft is 
published.

I also have many editorial comments, which I think can wait for a
subsequent edited version.

--apb (Alan Barrett)