[CRISP-TEAM] 2ND CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft - CRISP Review
apb at cequrux.com
Thu Jan 8 09:43:55 CET 2015
Thank you very much, Michael, for consolidating all the changes
into this document.
I believe that all the changes that I proposed have been
I have the following comments and suggestions:
1. A change to section III.A no longer makes sense.
A re-write of parts of section III.A mean that this paragraph no
longer fits in its current position just before III.A.4:
While there are no concrete needs or plans at this point, the
NRO EC may in the future determine that the IANA functions
related to number resources should be transferred to a different
contractor. In such a case, selection of a new contractor shall be
conducted in a fair, open and transparent process, in line with
applicable industry best practices and standards. Associated
requests for proposals, responses, and the contract itself, shall
I think that this paragraph can be removed, because the ideas in
this paragraph are adequately captured under "viii. Continuity of
Operations", but I'd like confirmation from others.
2. Diagram in section VI.E.
I think that we should publish a text version of the document, and
others might want to publish translations of the document, but the
diagram in section "VI.E LACNIC regional process" makes that difficult.
Could we replace the diagram with a textual description?
3. Inconsistencies in formatting
I noticed a few inconsistencies in formatting, such as lines with
different indentation or bold or italic attributes from other similar
lines, or paragraphs separated from their neighbours by only a line
break without a blank line.
4. Numbering under III.A.3
Several of the points under "III.A.3. Contract and Service level agreement"
have non-hierarchical numbers, like "ii. Distribution of Internet Number
Resources by the IANA Operator to RIRs". I think this would be better
I am willing to work on all these issues, if there is agreement, and if
I could have access to the origiinal .docx file.
--apb (Alan Barrett)
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