[CRISP-TEAM] List of texts to be incorporated in 2nd draft

[Izumi Okutani]

Michael and CRISP Team,


This is the updated version, after we closed the comment period.
Each item (except comment from Filiz) is consistent with title of e-mail
thread, so it should be trackable from that.

It's possible I may have missed something, so I would recommend you to
double check with your list, which I trust you would anyways.

Let me know if you have any questions/clarifications needed!
Many thanks Michael.



To CRISP Team,
If there are any text suggestions you made but not listed here, please
share on the list so that Michael can reflect in the 2nd draft.


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* delegation of IN-ADDR.ARPA and IP6.ARPA DNS trees
      --> Alan's text on IANAXFER list "delegation of
          IN-ADDR.ARPA and IP6.ARPA DNS trees"

* V NTIA Requirements
      --> Nurani's text "Section V NTIA Requirements - final version"

* Editorial suggestions (From Filiz Yilmaz)
      --> Reflect what is described on the IANAXFER list

* CRISP proposal Section VI. Community Process
  (Section VI)
   -  Comments made by Paul, Andrei, Craig, Esteban, Andres, Ernest,
      Mwendwa, Izumi
   -  SectionVI-v1.3.docx sent by Nurani needs to incorporate texts
      from Ernest and Mwenedwa (See "Changes to be incorporated")
   -  APNIC text, sent by Craig NG needs to be incorporated
   -  Please double check whether comments from Paul and Andrei are
      incorporated.
   -  ARIN region proposal waiting to be reflected

* IPR considerations - Final text
   - Andrei has shared the draft incorporating Alan & Izumi's comments
     (CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft 24122014-IPR-issues-final.docx)

* SLA Principles - FInal text - section III
   - Draft shared by Paul after the 9th call
     (CRISP-IANA-SLA-Section III final text - Nurani Paul.docx)
   - Izumi has made comment
     (Not to be reflected until confirmation from Paul or Nurani)

* Review Committee changes
   - Draft shared by Alan: two versions sent, check the latest one
     (CRISP IANA PROPOSAL Draft with Review Committee issues
20150107-redline.docx)
   - Alan has made text suggestion to Izumi's comment "Maximum Review
     Interval Term to be 3 years"
     (Not reflected in the latest word file, and needs to be
      incorporated in the 2nd draft)
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Regards,
Izumi


On 2015/01/08 3:07, Izumi Okutani wrote:
> Michael,
> 
> 
> Please find below the list of texts which needs to be incorporated in
> the 2nd draft.
> 
> Alan and Nurani,
> It would be helpful, if you are able to send Michael the latest version,
> for clarfiy.
> 
> 
> * delegation of IN-ADDR.ARPA and IP6.ARPA DNS trees
>        --> Reflect Alan's text on IANAXFER list "delegation of
>            IN-ADDR.ARPA and IP6.ARPA DNS trees"
> 
> * V NTIA Requirements
>        --> Reflect Nurani's text
>       [Nurani: Please send the latest version to Michael for clarity]
> 
> 
> * Editorial suggestions (From Filiz Yilmaz)
>        --> Reflect what is described on the IANAXFER list
> 
> * CRISP proposal Section VI. Community Process
>    (Section VI)
>     -  Comments made by Paul, Andrei, Craig, Esteban, Andres, Ernest,
>        Mwendwa, Izumi
>     -  ARIN region proposal waiting to be reflected
> 
> * IPR considerations - Final text
>     - Andrei has shared the draft incorporating Alan & Izumi's comments
> 
> * SLA Principles - FInal text - section III
>     - Draft shared by Paul
>     - Izumi has made comment
> 
> * Review Committee changes
>     - Draft shared by Alan
>     - Alan has made text suggestion to Izumi's comment "Maximum Review
>       Interval Term to be 3 years"
>       [Alan: Please send the latest version to Michael for clarity]
> 
> 
> Thanks,
> Izumi
>