[CRISP-TEAM] ver.5 Draft Announcement for the proposal
Izumi Okutani
izumi at nic.ad.jp
Thu Jan 8 03:11:58 CET 2015
CRISP Team,
A re-send with version number updated: ver.5
No changes in the draft annnouncement including wordings.
I felt keeping the right version number is important for clarity.
Thanks,
Izumi
ver.5
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Internet Number Community IANA Stewardship Proposal: Final Call for Comments
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Dear colleagues,
Please find the second draft of the Internet numbers community's
response to the Request For Proposals issued by the IANA Stewardship
Coordination Group (ICG).
This draft has been prepared by the Consolidated RIR IANA Stewardship
Proposal (CRISP) Team, with considerations of feedback received from the
global community on <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.
We have incorporated the following key points in the second draft:
- Additional description on contract details, review committee and
intellectual property rights
- Description revised on Section V. NITA Requirements and VI.
Community Process for more clarity
- No changes are made to key elements of the proposal
The CRISP Team have considered all comments expressed on
<ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list, and would now like to make the final
call for comments from the global community on the draft proposal,
before submitting to the ICG.
Second Draft proposal:
------------------------
Clean Version: ## URL ##
Redline Version: ## URL ##
The deadline for providing feedback: Mon, 12 January 2015 23:59 UTC
Feedback should be sent to : <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list
Community Inputs Considered by the CRISP Team:
------------------------------------------
You can check the status of the issues raised by the community and
proposed the CRISP Team positions at:
## URL ##
Key dates:
-----------
Second draft to be published : 8 Jan 2015
Second draft comments close : 12 Jan 2015, 23:59 UTC
Final proposal to be sent to ICG : 15 Jan 2015
How to Engage in Discussions:
-----------------------------
All global discussions, for the CRISP team to consider as community
feedback, will be conducted at <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.
All the CRISP Team discussions are open to observers.
Next Step:
-----------
In developing the final draft based on further feedback, the CRISP
Team will ensure it has completed considerations of all substantial
issues raised by the global community, which are compiled in the
published issues list. The proposal will only incorporate issues that
the CRISP team believes have received consensus support from the
community.
References:
------------
* Discussions by the CRISP Team
Details of all the CRISP team's work to date, including recordings,
minutes and agendas of all the CRISP Team teleconferences and a
public archive of the internal CRISP team mailing list, are
available at:
https://nro.net/crisp-team
* Other links:
- The ICG request for proposals:
<https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-3-2014-09-03-en>
- The IANA Stewardship Transition Discussion in each RIR region:
<https://www.nro.net/nro-and-internet-governance/iana-oversight/timeline-for-rirs-engagement-in-iana-stewardship-transition-process>
- First Draft proposal (Edited version)
<https://www.nro.net/wp-content/uploads/CRISP-IANA-PROPOSAL-Draft-24122014-clean.pdf>
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On 2015/01/08 11:08, Izumi Okutani wrote:
> Nurani, Alan, CRISP Team,
>
>
> Many thanks for your feedback to the announcement.
> Really helpful including editorial checks.
>
> I will follow up with NRO Secretariat about sharking links to archives
> of mailing lists on CRISP Team page, with other actions for NRO Secretariat.
>
>
> See the updated version with the following changes:
>
> - the second draft --> kept the word as it is
> (Alan, indeed I used this word for the reason you mentioned)
>
> - expresed --> expressed
>
> - CRISP team --> the CRISP Team
> (the kept as small letter to be consistent with NRO website)
>
> - ICG --> the ICG
>
> - Replace the last sentence in "Next Step": positive wording
> "The proposal will only incorporate issues that the CRISP
> team believes have received consensus support from the community."
> (The intention of the original sentence was, to ensure to the
> community that we are not proposing which was not agreed.
> Having said that, I do agree with Nurani's text - Thanks!)
>
>
> Thanks,
> Izumi
>
> ----------------------------------------------------------------------
> Internet Number Community IANA Stewardship Proposal: Final Call for Comments
> ----------------------------------------------------------------------
> Dear colleagues,
>
>
> Please find the second draft of the Internet numbers community's
> response to the Request For Proposals issued by the IANA Stewardship
> Coordination Group (ICG).
>
> This draft has been prepared by the Consolidated RIR IANA Stewardship
> Proposal (CRISP) Team, with considerations of feedback received from the
> global community on <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.
>
> We have incorporated the following key points in the second draft:
>
> - Additional description on contract details, review committee and
> intellectual property rights
> - Description revised on Section V. NITA Requirements and VI.
> Community Process for more clarity
> - No changes are made to key elements of the proposal
>
> The CRISP Team have considered all comments expressed on
> <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list, and would now like to make the final
> call for comments from the global community on the draft proposal,
> before submitting to the ICG.
>
> Second Draft proposal:
> ------------------------
> Clean Version: ## URL ##
> Redline Version: ## URL ##
>
> The deadline for providing feedback: Mon, 12 January 2015 23:59 UTC
> Feedback should be sent to : <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list
>
> Community Inputs Considered by the CRISP Team:
> ------------------------------------------
> You can check the status of the issues raised by the community and
> proposed the CRISP Team positions at:
>
> ## URL ##
>
> Key dates:
> -----------
> Second draft to be published : 8 Jan 2015
> Second draft comments close : 12 Jan 2015, 23:59 UTC
> Final proposal to be sent to ICG : 15 Jan 2015
>
> How to Engage in Discussions:
> -----------------------------
> All global discussions, for the CRISP team to consider as community
> feedback, will be conducted at <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.
> All the CRISP Team discussions are open to observers.
>
> Next Step:
> -----------
> In developing the final draft based on further feedback, the CRISP
> Team will ensure it has completed considerations of all substantial
> issues raised by the global community, which are compiled in the
> published issues list. The proposal will only incorporate issues that
> the CRISP team believes have received consensus support from the
> community.
>
> References:
> ------------
> * Discussions by the CRISP Team
> Details of all the CRISP team's work to date, including recordings,
> minutes and agendas of all the CRISP Team teleconferences and a
> public archive of the internal CRISP team mailing list, are
> available at:
> https://nro.net/crisp-team
>
> * Other links:
> - The ICG request for proposals:
> <https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-3-2014-09-03-en>
>
> - The IANA Stewardship Transition Discussion in each RIR region:
>
> <https://www.nro.net/nro-and-internet-governance/iana-oversight/timeline-for-rirs-engagement-in-iana-stewardship-transition-process>
>
> - First Draft proposal (Edited version)
>
> <https://www.nro.net/wp-content/uploads/CRISP-IANA-PROPOSAL-Draft-24122014-clean.pdf>
>
> ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>
>
>
> On 2015/01/08 5:32, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>> On 7 jan 2015, at 21:22, Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com> wrote:
>>
>>> On Wed, 07 Jan 2015, Nurani Nimpuno wrote:
>>>>> Dear colleagues,
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Please find the second draft of the Internet numbers community's
>>>>
>>>> Could we say "second, and final draft" here?
>>>> (And the proposal we send to the ICG is called the "finalised proposal"?)
>>>
>>> I'd prefer not to label anything as a "final draft" until we send it to
>>> the ICG. There's the possibility that something unforseen may happen to
>>> make us produce another draft.
>>
>> Ok, I take your point. Let's keep the current wording.
>>
>>>>> CRISP team have considered all comments expresed on <ianaxfer at nro.net>
>>>>
>>>> expressed
>>>
>>> Also "The CRISP Team".
>>>
>>>
>>>>> In developing the final draft based on further feedback, CRISP Team
>>>>
>>>> "The CRISP Team"
>>>>
>>>>> will ensure it has completed considerations of all substantial issues
>>>>> raised by the global community, which are compiled on the published
>>>>
>>>> compiled in the published
>>>>
>>>>> issues list. The Team will not incorporate any issues which are
>>>>> considered to be unresolved by CRISP Team into the proposal.
>>>>
>>>> Could we reword this to something more positive, but still clear?
>>>> Would the following work:
>>>>
>>>> "The proposal will only incorporate issues that the CRISP team believes have received consensus support from the community".
>>>
>>> I like Nurani's suggested text.
>>>
>>>>> * Discussions by CRISP Team
>>>>> Details of all the CRISP team's work to date, including recordings,
>>>>> minutes and agendas of all CRISP teleconferences and a public
>>>>> archive of the internal CRISP team mailing list, are available at:
>>>>> https://nro.net/crisp-team
>>>
>>> Last time I checked, the mailing list archives were not easily
>>> accessible from that page. We could ask the secretariat to fix that.
>>
>> I sent a mail about that to the list today.
>> Nurani
>>
>>>
>>> --apb (Alan Barrett)
>>>
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