[CRISP-TEAM] ver.2 Re: [Feedback before UTC13:00 7th Jan] Draft Announcement for the proposal

[Izumi Okutani]

Thank you for the feedback Andrei.

CRISP Team,
This is the revised version for your review.


On 2015/01/07 2:40, Andrei Robachevsky wrote:
>>   For the community to confirm CRISP Team's response on each of the
>>     inputs, issues status list is published at:
> 
> Perhaps:
> 
> You can check the status of the issues raised by the community and
> proposed CRISP Team positions at:

Agreed.

> [...]
>> Key dates:
>>     Second draft to be published	    :  8 Jan 2015
>>     Second draft comments close	    : 12 Jan 2015
>>     Final proposal to be sent to ICG : 15 Jan 2015
> 
> Since we are counting hours, not days now, perhaps we should say 12 Jan
> 2015, 23:59 UTC, for the cut-off day?
> 
> On a slightly different subject, and I am not sure it should be part of
> this announcement, I think we wanted to communicate to the community the
> way we produce the final proposal. Specifically that all substantive
> issues are captured in the issue tracker (after the 12th) and are marked
> as resolved (before sending, either by the team consensus or by voting).
> We will not send a proposal that has unresolved issues from CRISP Team's
> point of view (kind of obvious, but ...).
> 

Good point. I think it's important we clearly explain this, for us to be
accountable for the contents of the proposal.

I added this as "Next Step" and open to suggestion on a better place.
Feeedback welcome on wording as well.

# I will also update the speadsheet to reflect what to be incorporated
  in the 2nd draft for the announcement




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Internet Number Community IANA Stewardship Proposal: Second Draft
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Dear colleagues,


Please find the second draft of the Internet numbers community's
response to the Request For Proposals issued by the IANA Stewardship
Coordination Group (ICG).

This draft has been prepared by the Consolidated RIR IANA Stewardship
Proposal (CRISP) team, with considerations of feedback received from the
global community on <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.

We have incorporated the following key points in the second draft:

  - Additional description on contract details, review committee and
    intellectual property rights
  - Description revised on Section V. NITA Requirements and VI.
    Community Process for more clarity
  - No changes are made to key elements of the proposal

We continue to welcome comments from the global community.


Second Draft proposal:
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 Clean Version: ## URL ##
 Redline Version: ## URL ##

 The deadline for providing feedback: Mon, 12 January 2015
 Feedback should be sent to         : <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list

Community Inputs Considered by CRISP Team:
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 You can check the status of the issues raised by the community and
 proposed CRISP Team positions at:

   ## URL ##

Key dates:
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   Second draft to be published	    :  8 Jan 2015
   Second draft comments close	    : 12 Jan 2015
   Final proposal to be sent to ICG : 15 Jan 2015

How to Engage in Discussions:
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  All global discussions, for CRISP team to consider as community
  feedback, will be conducted at <ianaxfer at nro.net> mailing list.
  All CRISP team discussions are open to observers.

Next Step:
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  In developing the final draft based on further feedback, CRISP Team
  will ensure it has completed considerations of all substantial issues
  raised by the global community, which are compiled on the published
  issues list. The Team will not incorporate any issues which are
  considered to be unresolved by CRISP Team into the proposal.

References:
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* Discussions by CRISP Team
    Details of all the CRISP team's work to date, including recordings,
    minutes and agendas of all CRISP teleconferences and a public
    archive of the internal CRISP team mailing list, are available at:
    https://nro.net/crisp-team

* Other links:
  - ICG request for proposals:
   <https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-3-2014-09-03-en>

  - The IANA Stewardship Transition Discussion in each RIR region:
<https://www.nro.net/nro-and-internet-governance/iana-oversight/timeline-for-rirs-engagement-in-iana-stewardship-transition-process>

  - First Draft proposal (Edited version)

https://www.nro.net/wp-content/uploads/CRISP-IANA-PROPOSAL-Draft-24122014-clean.pdf

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