[CRISP-TEAM] Section V NTIA Requirements Re: Updated proposal draft - reordering answers edit

[Nurani Nimpuno]

Dear Izumi,


On 5 jan 2015, at 00:09, Izumi Okutani <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:

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> >> 	Maintain the openness of the Internet.
> >>
> >> An "open" Internet relies on the effective implementation of policies developed via open, inclusive, bottom-up processes, ensuring the coordinated distribution and registration of Internet number resources. The Internet numbers community, has a longstanding history of bottom-up, inclusive, open and transparent policy-making and operational processes. By building on these structures developed by the Internet numbers community, this proposal ensures that in this regard, the openness of the Internet is maintained. In addition, the proposed community Review Committee will ensure bottom-up community involvement in the open and transparent evaluation of the IANA functions operation.
> >
> > Just want to confirm whether we want to cover openness of the IANA function  on number resources.
> > i.e., all records are published on iana.org and the proposal doesn't make changes to this part
> >
> > (I don't feel strongly about it and raising as a point to confirm)
> 
> I don't have stronger feelings either way. Happy to include it if others agree.
> 
> OK, let's keep as it is unless someone explicitly supports to include it.

Is the following a good improvement?

An "open" Internet relies on the effective implementation of policies developed via open, inclusive, bottom-up processes, ensuring the transparent and coordinated distribution and registration of Internet number resources. The Internet numbers community, has a longstanding history of bottom-up, inclusive, open and transparent policy-making and operational processes (including the transparent publication of all registration information). By building on the structures developed by the Internet numbers community, this proposal ensures that in this regard, the openness of the Internet is maintained. 

In addition, the proposed community Review Committee will ensure bottom-up community involvement in the open and transparent evaluation of the IANA functions operation.

Kind regards,

Nurani