[CRISP-TEAM] Announcement for the edited version_ ver.2

[Izumi Okutani]

Thank you for the feedback Alan, Mwendwa.

I'll make the annnouncement once the edited version is posted on the NRO
Website.


Izumi


On 2014/12/26 20:10, Mwendwa Kivuva wrote:
> I also support
> 
> On 25/12/2014, Alan Barrett <apb at cequrux.com> wrote:
>> On Thu, 25 Dec 2014, Izumi Okutani wrote:
>>> I felt the intention of the editorial changes ("to clarify our
>>> answers to RFP") is still valid and may be worth mentioning, so
>>> I added the second sentence in your suggested text, starting
>>> from "Some small" and kept the original sentence from my draft
>>> for the first sentence for now.
>>
>> That's fine.  I support your revised version below.
>>
>>> The editorial changes are intended to clarify our answers to
>>> RFP, by re-ordering answers in the same order as questions
>>> listed in each Section. Some small additions have been made
>>> to address points that had not been answered in the earlier
>>> draft. Finally, there are some changes made for stylistic
>>> reasons.
>>
>> --apb (Alan Barrett)
>>
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