[CRISP-TEAM] Announcement for the edited version_ ver.2

Alan Barrett apb at cequrux.com
Thu Dec 25 13:43:53 CET 2014

On Thu, 25 Dec 2014, Izumi Okutani wrote:
> I felt the intention of the editorial changes ("to clarify our 
> answers to RFP") is still valid and may be worth mentioning, so 
> I added the second sentence in your suggested text, starting 
> from "Some small" and kept the original sentence from my draft 
> for the first sentence for now.

That's fine.  I support your revised version below.

> The editorial changes are intended to clarify our answers to 
> RFP, by re-ordering answers in the same order as questions 
> listed in each Section. Some small additions have been made 
> to address points that had not been answered in the earlier 
> draft. Finally, there are some changes made for stylistic 
> reasons.

--apb (Alan Barrett)

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