[CRISP-TEAM] !! Reply requesed *ASAP* !! Re: Suggested text: Review Commitee

[Izumi Okutani]

Thank you John for your swift feedback.
It was helpful to know there is support for the change.

I released the announcement with this suggested change reflected.

Izumi

(2014/12/19 2:34), Sweeting, John wrote:
> I am fine with the change
>
> On 12/18/14, 12:33 PM, "Izumi Okutani" <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:
>
>> CRISP Team,
>>
>>
>> Please confirm to see whether you are OK with the suggested amendment.
>>
>>> may --> shall
>>>
>>> Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
>>> Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
>>> Review Committee
>>
>> As mentioned, we plan to announce the initial draft at UTC4:00am 20 Dec,
>> so I'd appreciate it if you could reply *ASAP* well before this time,
>> if you have concerns.
>>
>> Thanks,
>> Izumi
>>
>>
>> (2014/12/19 2:29), Izumi Okutani wrote:
>>> Thank you Andres for cordinating with Nico.
>>>
>>> CRISP Team,
>>> Is everyone happy with the suggested change?
>>>
>>> may --> shall
>>>
>>> Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
>>> Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
>>> Review Committee
>>>
>>> Izumi
>>>
>>> (2014/12/19 2:15), Andres Piazza wrote:
>>>> I spoke to Nico. I believe that he just want to replace the phrase
>>>> ������������������The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee������������������
>>>> for another language: ������������������The NRO Executive Council shall establish
>>>> a Review Committee������������������.
>>>>
>>>> ������������������Shall������������������ instead of ������������������May������������������
>>>>
>>>> And I also agree with the proposed text.
>>>>
>>>> Andr������������������s
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> El 12/18/14 1:26 PM, Izumi Okutani escribi������������������:
>>>>> Hi Nico,
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Thank you for your comment. I'm sorry to hear you couldn't
>>>>> participate in discussions and only listening. If there is anything
>>>>> we can do in terms of Webex side, I'm sure German would be happy to
>>>>> help.
>>>>>
>>>>> This is the version we discussed at the call today, worked by Andres.
>>>>> Does this address your suggestion?
>>>>>
>>>>> *If the latest version doesn't address it, please share a revised
>>>>> text on the ML ASAP.* We are planning to make an announcement at
>>>>> UTC4, 20 Dec (roughly 13h from now).
>>>>>
>>>>> If you are suggesting additional revision, it really would help, if
>>>>> you could get in touch with Andres and Michael as well, to make sure
>>>>> Andres is good with the suggested revision, as much as the rest of
>>>>> the team members.
>>>>>
>>>>> -----
>>>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level
>>>>> of the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>>>> respective communities.
>>>>>
>>>>> The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee that will
>>>>> advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its periodic review.
>>>>> Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of
>>>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake
>>>>> a review of the level of service received from the IANA functions
>>>>> operator and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns
>>>>> regarding any observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet
>>>>> its contractual obligations under the proposed contract.
>>>>>
>>>>> Any such Review Committee will advise the NRO Executive Council in
>>>>> its capacity solely to oversee the performance of the IANA number
>>>>> resource functions and the Review Committee���������������������������s advice and
>>>>> comment will be limited to the processes followed in the IANA
>>>>> functions operator���������������������������s performance under the proposed contract.
>>>>> -----
>>>>>
>>>>> Regards,
>>>>> Izumi
>>>>>
>>>>> (2014/12/19 0:03), Nico Scheper wrote:
>>>>>> Hi Izumi and other fellow colleagues,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> FYI. For some reason I could not log in the meeting today but I was
>>>>>> able
>>>>>> to participate by listening in through a Skype bridge facilitated by
>>>>>> Andres.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> On behalf of Lacnic. With respect to the Review Committee text the
>>>>>> following.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> The present version of the text is referring to
>>>>>> ���������������������������.���������������������������the NRO Executive
>>>>>> Council will conduct periodic reviews���������������������������
>>>>>> ������������������������������������������������������.���������������������������the NRO Executive Council may
>>>>>> establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist the NRO
>>>>>> Executive
>>>>>> Council in its periodic review���������������������������. It is Lacnic���������������������������s view
>>>>>> that the wording
>>>>>> should be in both sentences ���������������������������will���������������������������. So that would be
>>>>>> than ���������������������������.. ���������������������������the NRO
>>>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic review���������������������������
>>>>>> ���������������������������..���������������������������the NRO Executive
>>>>>> Council will establish a Review Committee that will advice and
>>>>>> assist the
>>>>>> NRO Executive Council���������������������������
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Kind regards,
>>>>>> Nico Scheper
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> On 12/18/14, 8:33 AM, "Andres Piazza" <andres at lacnic.net> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Dear Izumi,
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Thanks for this. It was hard to summarize the idea in one paragraph
>>>>>>> and
>>>>>>> other commmitements did not allow me to answer earlier.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> I touched base with your language and also had a really helpful
>>>>>>> imput
>>>>>>> from Michael.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Here I go:
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> El 12/18/14 8:27 AM, Izumi Okutani escribi���������������������������:
>>>>>>>> CRISP Team,
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> Since we are a few hours from the call, this is my suggested text
>>>>>>>> for
>>>>>>>> the part which describes Review Commitee.
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> If there is another text being worked on and can be shared, please
>>>>>>>> post
>>>>>>>> it here. We can disregard my version then.
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> I very much welcome your feeback from the team.
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> Michael,
>>>>>>>> As usual, *if* not other suggested text comes out before the
>>>>>>>> meeting
>>>>>>>> I'd appreciate it if you could incorporate this and any feedback
>>>>>>>> we get
>>>>>>>> on the list before the call, in the updated draft proposal.
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> If suggested text is shared on the list before the call, please
>>>>>>>> reflect
>>>>>>>> that, and not my version.
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> ------
>>>>>>>> (To be inserterted afer 2nd paragraph on SLA of Section III)
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>>>>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>>>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service
>>>>>>> level of
>>>>>>> the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>>>>>> respective communities. The NRO Executive Council may establish a
>>>>>>> Review
>>>>>>> Committee that will advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in
>>>>>>> its
>>>>>>> periodic review. Any such Review Committee should be a team
>>>>>>> composed of
>>>>>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed,
>>>>>>> undertake a
>>>>>>> review of the level of service received from the IANA functions
>>>>>>> operator
>>>>>>> and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any
>>>>>>> observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its
>>>>>>> contractual
>>>>>>> obligations under the proposed contract. Any such Review Committee
>>>>>>> will
>>>>>>> advise the NRO Executive Council in its capacity solely to oversee
>>>>>>> the
>>>>>>> performance of the IANA number resource functions and the Review
>>>>>>> Committee���������������������������s advice and comment will be limited to the
>>>>>>> processes followed
>>>>>>> in the IANA functions operator���������������������������s performance under the
>>>>>>> proposed contract.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> --
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Regards,
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Andr���������������������������s
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
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