[CRISP-TEAM] !! Reply requesed *ASAP* !! Re: Suggested text: Review Commitee

[Sweeting, John]

I am fine with the change

On 12/18/14, 12:33 PM, "Izumi Okutani" <izumi at nic.ad.jp> wrote:

>CRISP Team,
>
>
>Please confirm to see whether you are OK with the suggested amendment.
>
>> may --> shall
>>
>> Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
>> Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
>> Review Committee
>
>As mentioned, we plan to announce the initial draft at UTC4:00am 20 Dec,
>so I'd appreciate it if you could reply *ASAP* well before this time,
>if you have concerns.
>
>Thanks,
>Izumi
>
>
>(2014/12/19 2:29), Izumi Okutani wrote:
>> Thank you Andres for cordinating with Nico.
>>
>> CRISP Team,
>> Is everyone happy with the suggested change?
>>
>> may --> shall
>>
>> Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
>> Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
>> Review Committee
>>
>> Izumi
>>
>> (2014/12/19 2:15), Andres Piazza wrote:
>>> I spoke to Nico. I believe that he just want to replace the phrase
>>> ������The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee������
>>> for another language: ������The NRO Executive Council shall establish
>>> a Review Committee������.
>>>
>>> ������Shall������ instead of ������May������
>>>
>>> And I also agree with the proposed text.
>>>
>>> Andr������s
>>>
>>>
>>> El 12/18/14 1:26 PM, Izumi Okutani escribi������:
>>>> Hi Nico,
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Thank you for your comment. I'm sorry to hear you couldn't
>>>> participate in discussions and only listening. If there is anything
>>>> we can do in terms of Webex side, I'm sure German would be happy to
>>>> help.
>>>>
>>>> This is the version we discussed at the call today, worked by Andres.
>>>> Does this address your suggestion?
>>>>
>>>> *If the latest version doesn't address it, please share a revised
>>>> text on the ML ASAP.* We are planning to make an announcement at
>>>> UTC4, 20 Dec (roughly 13h from now).
>>>>
>>>> If you are suggesting additional revision, it really would help, if
>>>> you could get in touch with Andres and Michael as well, to make sure
>>>> Andres is good with the suggested revision, as much as the rest of
>>>> the team members.
>>>>
>>>> -----
>>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level
>>>> of the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>>> respective communities.
>>>>
>>>> The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee that will
>>>> advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its periodic review.
>>>> Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of
>>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake
>>>> a review of the level of service received from the IANA functions
>>>> operator and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns
>>>> regarding any observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet
>>>> its contractual obligations under the proposed contract.
>>>>
>>>> Any such Review Committee will advise the NRO Executive Council in
>>>> its capacity solely to oversee the performance of the IANA number
>>>> resource functions and the Review Committee���������s advice and
>>>> comment will be limited to the processes followed in the IANA
>>>> functions operator���������s performance under the proposed contract.
>>>> -----
>>>>
>>>> Regards,
>>>> Izumi
>>>>
>>>> (2014/12/19 0:03), Nico Scheper wrote:
>>>>> Hi Izumi and other fellow colleagues,
>>>>>
>>>>> FYI. For some reason I could not log in the meeting today but I was
>>>>> able
>>>>> to participate by listening in through a Skype bridge facilitated by
>>>>> Andres.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> On behalf of Lacnic. With respect to the Review Committee text the
>>>>> following.
>>>>>
>>>>> The present version of the text is referring to
>>>>> ���������.���������the NRO Executive
>>>>> Council will conduct periodic reviews���������
>>>>> ������������������.���������the NRO Executive Council may
>>>>> establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist the NRO
>>>>> Executive
>>>>> Council in its periodic review���������. It is Lacnic���������s view
>>>>> that the wording
>>>>> should be in both sentences ���������will���������. So that would be
>>>>> than ���������.. ���������the NRO
>>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic review���������
>>>>> ���������..���������the NRO Executive
>>>>> Council will establish a Review Committee that will advice and
>>>>> assist the
>>>>> NRO Executive Council���������
>>>>>
>>>>> Kind regards,
>>>>> Nico Scheper
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> On 12/18/14, 8:33 AM, "Andres Piazza" <andres at lacnic.net> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> Dear Izumi,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Thanks for this. It was hard to summarize the idea in one paragraph
>>>>>> and
>>>>>> other commmitements did not allow me to answer earlier.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> I touched base with your language and also had a really helpful
>>>>>>imput
>>>>>> from Michael.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Here I go:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> El 12/18/14 8:27 AM, Izumi Okutani escribi���������:
>>>>>>> CRISP Team,
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Since we are a few hours from the call, this is my suggested text
>>>>>>>for
>>>>>>> the part which describes Review Commitee.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> If there is another text being worked on and can be shared, please
>>>>>>> post
>>>>>>> it here. We can disregard my version then.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> I very much welcome your feeback from the team.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Michael,
>>>>>>> As usual, *if* not other suggested text comes out before the
>>>>>>>meeting
>>>>>>> I'd appreciate it if you could incorporate this and any feedback
>>>>>>> we get
>>>>>>> on the list before the call, in the updated draft proposal.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> If suggested text is shared on the list before the call, please
>>>>>>> reflect
>>>>>>> that, and not my version.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> ------
>>>>>>> (To be inserterted afer 2nd paragraph on SLA of Section III)
>>>>>>
>>>>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>>>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service
>>>>>> level of
>>>>>> the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>>>>> respective communities. The NRO Executive Council may establish a
>>>>>> Review
>>>>>> Committee that will advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in
>>>>>>its
>>>>>> periodic review. Any such Review Committee should be a team
>>>>>> composed of
>>>>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed,
>>>>>>undertake a
>>>>>> review of the level of service received from the IANA functions
>>>>>> operator
>>>>>> and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any
>>>>>> observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its
>>>>>> contractual
>>>>>> obligations under the proposed contract. Any such Review Committee
>>>>>> will
>>>>>> advise the NRO Executive Council in its capacity solely to oversee
>>>>>>the
>>>>>> performance of the IANA number resource functions and the Review
>>>>>> Committee���������s advice and comment will be limited to the
>>>>>> processes followed
>>>>>> in the IANA functions operator���������s performance under the
>>>>>> proposed contract.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> --
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Regards,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Andr���������s
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
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