[CRISP-TEAM] !! Reply requesed *ASAP* !! Re: Suggested text: Review Commitee

[Izumi Okutani]

CRISP Team,


Please confirm to see whether you are OK with the suggested amendment.

> may --> shall
>
> Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
> Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
> Review Committee

As mentioned, we plan to announce the initial draft at UTC4:00am 20 Dec,
so I'd appreciate it if you could reply *ASAP* well before this time,
if you have concerns.

Thanks,
Izumi


(2014/12/19 2:29), Izumi Okutani wrote:
> Thank you Andres for cordinating with Nico.
> 
> CRISP Team,
> Is everyone happy with the suggested change?
> 
> may --> shall
> 
> Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
> Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
> Review Committee
> 
> Izumi
> 
> (2014/12/19 2:15), Andres Piazza wrote:
>> I spoke to Nico. I believe that he just want to replace the phrase 
>> ������The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee������ 
>> for another language: ������The NRO Executive Council shall establish 
>> a Review Committee������.
>>
>> ������Shall������ instead of ������May������
>>
>> And I also agree with the proposed text.
>>
>> Andr������s
>>
>>
>> El 12/18/14 1:26 PM, Izumi Okutani escribi������:
>>> Hi Nico,
>>>
>>>
>>> Thank you for your comment. I'm sorry to hear you couldn't 
>>> participate in discussions and only listening. If there is anything 
>>> we can do in terms of Webex side, I'm sure German would be happy to 
>>> help.
>>>
>>> This is the version we discussed at the call today, worked by Andres.
>>> Does this address your suggestion?
>>>
>>> *If the latest version doesn't address it, please share a revised 
>>> text on the ML ASAP.* We are planning to make an announcement at 
>>> UTC4, 20 Dec (roughly 13h from now).
>>>
>>> If you are suggesting additional revision, it really would help, if 
>>> you could get in touch with Andres and Michael as well, to make sure 
>>> Andres is good with the suggested revision, as much as the rest of 
>>> the team members.
>>>
>>> -----
>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is 
>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO 
>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level 
>>> of the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their 
>>> respective communities.
>>>
>>> The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee that will 
>>> advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its periodic review. 
>>> Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of 
>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake 
>>> a review of the level of service received from the IANA functions 
>>> operator and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns 
>>> regarding any observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet 
>>> its contractual obligations under the proposed contract.
>>>
>>> Any such Review Committee will advise the NRO Executive Council in 
>>> its capacity solely to oversee the performance of the IANA number 
>>> resource functions and the Review Committee���������s advice and 
>>> comment will be limited to the processes followed in the IANA 
>>> functions operator���������s performance under the proposed contract.
>>> -----
>>>
>>> Regards,
>>> Izumi
>>>
>>> (2014/12/19 0:03), Nico Scheper wrote:
>>>> Hi Izumi and other fellow colleagues,
>>>>
>>>> FYI. For some reason I could not log in the meeting today but I was 
>>>> able
>>>> to participate by listening in through a Skype bridge facilitated by
>>>> Andres.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> On behalf of Lacnic. With respect to the Review Committee text the
>>>> following.
>>>>
>>>> The present version of the text is referring to 
>>>> ���������.���������the NRO Executive
>>>> Council will conduct periodic reviews��������� 
>>>> ������������������.���������the NRO Executive Council may
>>>> establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist the NRO 
>>>> Executive
>>>> Council in its periodic review���������. It is Lacnic���������s view 
>>>> that the wording
>>>> should be in both sentences ���������will���������. So that would be 
>>>> than ���������.. ���������the NRO
>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic review��������� 
>>>> ���������..���������the NRO Executive
>>>> Council will establish a Review Committee that will advice and 
>>>> assist the
>>>> NRO Executive Council���������
>>>>
>>>> Kind regards,
>>>> Nico Scheper
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> On 12/18/14, 8:33 AM, "Andres Piazza" <andres at lacnic.net> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> Dear Izumi,
>>>>>
>>>>> Thanks for this. It was hard to summarize the idea in one paragraph 
>>>>> and
>>>>> other commmitements did not allow me to answer earlier.
>>>>>
>>>>> I touched base with your language and also had a really helpful imput
>>>>> from Michael.
>>>>>
>>>>> Here I go:
>>>>>
>>>>> El 12/18/14 8:27 AM, Izumi Okutani escribi���������:
>>>>>> CRISP Team,
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Since we are a few hours from the call, this is my suggested text for
>>>>>> the part which describes Review Commitee.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> If there is another text being worked on and can be shared, please 
>>>>>> post
>>>>>> it here. We can disregard my version then.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> I very much welcome your feeback from the team.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Michael,
>>>>>> As usual, *if* not other suggested text comes out before the meeting
>>>>>> I'd appreciate it if you could incorporate this and any feedback 
>>>>>> we get
>>>>>> on the list before the call, in the updated draft proposal.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> If suggested text is shared on the list before the call, please 
>>>>>> reflect
>>>>>> that, and not my version.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> ------
>>>>>> (To be inserterted afer 2nd paragraph on SLA of Section III)
>>>>>
>>>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service 
>>>>> level of
>>>>> the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>>>> respective communities. The NRO Executive Council may establish a 
>>>>> Review
>>>>> Committee that will advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its
>>>>> periodic review. Any such Review Committee should be a team 
>>>>> composed of
>>>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake a
>>>>> review of the level of service received from the IANA functions 
>>>>> operator
>>>>> and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any
>>>>> observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its 
>>>>> contractual
>>>>> obligations under the proposed contract. Any such Review Committee 
>>>>> will
>>>>> advise the NRO Executive Council in its capacity solely to oversee the
>>>>> performance of the IANA number resource functions and the Review
>>>>> Committee���������s advice and comment will be limited to the 
>>>>> processes followed
>>>>> in the IANA functions operator���������s performance under the 
>>>>> proposed contract.
>>>>>
>>>>> -- 
>>>>>
>>>>> Regards,
>>>>>
>>>>> Andr���������s
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
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