[CRISP-TEAM] Suggested text: Review Commitee

[Izumi Okutani]

Thank you Andres for cordinating with Nico.

CRISP Team,
Is everyone happy with the suggested change?

 may --> shall

 Current: NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee
 Suggested replacement: The NRO Executive Council shall establish a
Review Committee

Izumi

(2014/12/19 2:15), Andres Piazza wrote:
> I spoke to Nico. I believe that he just want to replace the phrase ��The 
> NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee�� for another 
> language: ��The NRO Executive Council shall establish a Review Committee��.
> 
> ��Shall�� instead of ��May��
> 
> And I also agree with the proposed text.
> 
> Andr��s
> 
> 
> El 12/18/14 1:26 PM, Izumi Okutani escribi��:
>> Hi Nico,
>>
>>
>> Thank you for your comment. I'm sorry to hear you couldn't participate 
>> in discussions and only listening. If there is anything we can do in 
>> terms of Webex side, I'm sure German would be happy to help.
>>
>> This is the version we discussed at the call today, worked by Andres.
>> Does this address your suggestion?
>>
>> *If the latest version doesn't address it, please share a revised text 
>> on the ML ASAP.* We are planning to make an announcement at UTC4, 20 
>> Dec (roughly 13h from now).
>>
>> If you are suggesting additional revision, it really would help, if 
>> you could get in touch with Andres and Michael as well, to make sure 
>> Andres is good with the suggested revision, as much as the rest of the 
>> team members.
>>
>> -----
>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is 
>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO 
>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level 
>> of the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their 
>> respective communities.
>>
>> The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee that will 
>> advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its periodic review. 
>> Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of representatives 
>> from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake a review of the 
>> level of service received from the IANA functions operator and report 
>> to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any observed 
>> failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its contractual 
>> obligations under the proposed contract.
>>
>> Any such Review Committee will advise the NRO Executive Council in its 
>> capacity solely to oversee the performance of the IANA number resource 
>> functions and the Review Committee���s advice and comment will be 
>> limited to the processes followed in the IANA functions operator���s 
>> performance under the proposed contract.
>> -----
>>
>> Regards,
>> Izumi
>>
>> (2014/12/19 0:03), Nico Scheper wrote:
>>> Hi Izumi and other fellow colleagues,
>>>
>>> FYI. For some reason I could not log in the meeting today but I was able
>>> to participate by listening in through a Skype bridge facilitated by
>>> Andres.
>>>
>>>
>>> On behalf of Lacnic. With respect to the Review Committee text the
>>> following.
>>>
>>> The present version of the text is referring to ���.���the NRO Executive
>>> Council will conduct periodic reviews��� ������.���the NRO Executive 
>>> Council may
>>> establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist the NRO 
>>> Executive
>>> Council in its periodic review���. It is Lacnic���s view that the 
>>> wording
>>> should be in both sentences ���will���. So that would be than ���.. 
>>> ���the NRO
>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic review��� ���..���the NRO 
>>> Executive
>>> Council will establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist 
>>> the
>>> NRO Executive Council���
>>>
>>> Kind regards,
>>> Nico Scheper
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On 12/18/14, 8:33 AM, "Andres Piazza" <andres at lacnic.net> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Dear Izumi,
>>>>
>>>> Thanks for this. It was hard to summarize the idea in one paragraph and
>>>> other commmitements did not allow me to answer earlier.
>>>>
>>>> I touched base with your language and also had a really helpful imput
>>>> from Michael.
>>>>
>>>> Here I go:
>>>>
>>>> El 12/18/14 8:27 AM, Izumi Okutani escribi���:
>>>>> CRISP Team,
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Since we are a few hours from the call, this is my suggested text for
>>>>> the part which describes Review Commitee.
>>>>>
>>>>> If there is another text being worked on and can be shared, please 
>>>>> post
>>>>> it here. We can disregard my version then.
>>>>>
>>>>> I very much welcome your feeback from the team.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Michael,
>>>>> As usual, *if* not other suggested text comes out before the meeting
>>>>> I'd appreciate it if you could incorporate this and any feedback we 
>>>>> get
>>>>> on the list before the call, in the updated draft proposal.
>>>>>
>>>>> If suggested text is shared on the list before the call, please 
>>>>> reflect
>>>>> that, and not my version.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> ------
>>>>> (To be inserterted afer 2nd paragraph on SLA of Section III)
>>>>
>>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level of
>>>> the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>>> respective communities. The NRO Executive Council may establish a 
>>>> Review
>>>> Committee that will advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its
>>>> periodic review. Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of
>>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake a
>>>> review of the level of service received from the IANA functions 
>>>> operator
>>>> and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any
>>>> observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its contractual
>>>> obligations under the proposed contract. Any such Review Committee will
>>>> advise the NRO Executive Council in its capacity solely to oversee the
>>>> performance of the IANA number resource functions and the Review
>>>> Committee���s advice and comment will be limited to the processes 
>>>> followed
>>>> in the IANA functions operator���s performance under the proposed 
>>>> contract.
>>>>
>>>> -- 
>>>>
>>>> Regards,
>>>>
>>>> Andr���s
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
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