[CRISP-TEAM] Suggested text: Review Commitee

[Andres Piazza]

I spoke to Nico. I believe that he just want to replace the phrase ¨The 
NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee¨ for another 
language: ¨The NRO Executive Council shall establish a Review Committee¨.

¨Shall¨ instead of ¨May¨

And I also agree with the proposed text.

Andrés


El 12/18/14 1:26 PM, Izumi Okutani escribió:
> Hi Nico,
>
>
> Thank you for your comment. I'm sorry to hear you couldn't participate 
> in discussions and only listening. If there is anything we can do in 
> terms of Webex side, I'm sure German would be happy to help.
>
> This is the version we discussed at the call today, worked by Andres.
> Does this address your suggestion?
>
> *If the latest version doesn't address it, please share a revised text 
> on the ML ASAP.* We are planning to make an announcement at UTC4, 20 
> Dec (roughly 13h from now).
>
> If you are suggesting additional revision, it really would help, if 
> you could get in touch with Andres and Michael as well, to make sure 
> Andres is good with the suggested revision, as much as the rest of the 
> team members.
>
> -----
> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is 
> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO 
> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level 
> of the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their 
> respective communities.
>
> The NRO Executive Council may establish a Review Committee that will 
> advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its periodic review.  
> Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of representatives 
> from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake a review of the 
> level of service received from the IANA functions operator and report 
> to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any observed 
> failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its contractual 
> obligations under the proposed contract.
>
> Any such Review Committee will advise the NRO Executive Council in its 
> capacity solely to oversee the performance of the IANA number resource 
> functions and the Review Committee’s advice and comment will be 
> limited to the processes followed in the IANA functions operator’s 
> performance under the proposed contract.
> -----
>
> Regards,
> Izumi
>
> (2014/12/19 0:03), Nico Scheper wrote:
>> Hi Izumi and other fellow colleagues,
>>
>> FYI. For some reason I could not log in the meeting today but I was able
>> to participate by listening in through a Skype bridge facilitated by
>> Andres.
>>
>>
>> On behalf of Lacnic. With respect to the Review Committee text the
>> following.
>>
>> The present version of the text is referring to �.�the NRO Executive
>> Council will conduct periodic reviews� ��.�the NRO Executive Council may
>> establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist the NRO 
>> Executive
>> Council in its periodic review�. It is Lacnic�s view that the wording
>> should be in both sentences �will�. So that would be than �.. �the NRO
>> Executive Council will conduct periodic review� �..�the NRO Executive
>> Council will establish a Review Committee that will advice and assist 
>> the
>> NRO Executive Council�
>>
>> Kind regards,
>> Nico Scheper
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> On 12/18/14, 8:33 AM, "Andres Piazza" <andres at lacnic.net> wrote:
>>
>>> Dear Izumi,
>>>
>>> Thanks for this. It was hard to summarize the idea in one paragraph and
>>> other commmitements did not allow me to answer earlier.
>>>
>>> I touched base with your language and also had a really helpful imput
>>> from Michael.
>>>
>>> Here I go:
>>>
>>> El 12/18/14 8:27 AM, Izumi Okutani escribi�:
>>>> CRISP Team,
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Since we are a few hours from the call, this is my suggested text for
>>>> the part which describes Review Commitee.
>>>>
>>>> If there is another text being worked on and can be shared, please 
>>>> post
>>>> it here. We can disregard my version then.
>>>>
>>>> I very much welcome your feeback from the team.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Michael,
>>>> As usual, *if* not other suggested text comes out before the meeting
>>>> I'd appreciate it if you could incorporate this and any feedback we 
>>>> get
>>>> on the list before the call, in the updated draft proposal.
>>>>
>>>> If suggested text is shared on the list before the call, please 
>>>> reflect
>>>> that, and not my version.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> ------
>>>> (To be inserterted afer 2nd paragraph on SLA of Section III)
>>>
>>> To ensure the service level defined in the proposed contract is
>>> maintained and provided by the IANA functions operator, the NRO
>>> Executive Council will conduct periodic reviews of the service level of
>>> the IANA number resource functions that serves each RIR and their
>>> respective communities. The NRO Executive Council may establish a 
>>> Review
>>> Committee that will advise and assist the NRO Executive Council in its
>>> periodic review. Any such Review Committee should be a team composed of
>>> representatives from each RIR region that will, as needed, undertake a
>>> review of the level of service received from the IANA functions 
>>> operator
>>> and report to the NRO Executive Council any concerns regarding any
>>> observed failure by the IANA functions operator to meet its contractual
>>> obligations under the proposed contract. Any such Review Committee will
>>> advise the NRO Executive Council in its capacity solely to oversee the
>>> performance of the IANA number resource functions and the Review
>>> Committee�s advice and comment will be limited to the processes 
>>> followed
>>> in the IANA functions operator�s performance under the proposed 
>>> contract.
>>>
>>> -- 
>>>
>>> Regards,
>>>
>>> Andr�s
>>>
>>>
>>>
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