[CRISP-TEAM] Input for discussion: a drafty-draft

[Izumi Okutani]

Many thanks Andrei, Michael for taking this initiative.

I encourage all in CRISP Team to take a look, including those who have 
not volunteered in drafting, and share inputs you have at this stage.

While a coordinated draft is prepared by Michael, Craig, Andrei and 
Esteban at the moment, feedbacks on this version helps, especially if 
you have any comments on description of existing mechanisms, which is 
less likely to need coordination of regional differences.

 > One logistical item, I know that the agenda for tomorrow�s call includes
 > an item for drafting tools; however, in the meantime before we decide 
on a
 > tool, might I propose that the drafting team (myself, Andrei, Esteban &
 > Craig) �has the pen� with regard to this current draft and will be
 > responsible for updating the drafts accordingly in response to comments
 > and edits received via e-mail from the members of the CRISP team.  This
 > will hopefully avoid too many drafts crossing in cyberspace and getting
 > confusing.  Then once we decide on a drafting tool tomorrow, we can move
 > forward accordingly.

Michael, this makes sense and sounds practical to me unless anyone 
identify issues they want to raise.

Izumi

(2014/12/10 19:44), Michael Abejuela wrote:
> Hello CRISP team,
>
> Thank you Andrei for forwarding this draft to the team for review.  We
> observe that RIPE combined items from both ARIN�s and RIPE�s draft
> proposals as they are in response format for ease of the team�s review.  I
> agree with Andrei and expect this is a good starting point from which the
> team will have a substantive discussion.
>
> To respond to your comment Andres, you are correct, the Drafting Team
> (myself, Craig, Andrei and Esteban) will endeavor to reflect the
> similarities and differences of the regional proposals as best as
> possible.  At this point we are circulating drafts quickly to begin the
> discussion and to make for a more effective discussion on the call
> tomorrow.
>
> To add to the draft circulated by Andrei, attached is a redline and the
> following comments as well as an updated �clean� version:
>
> (1)	You will observe some edits to sections 1 & 2 that just add a bit more
> detail and clarification that hopefully is not too contentious;
> (2)	With the bulk of discussions expected in sections 3 & 4, you will
> observe again some edits to add some detail and clarification;
> (3)	The removal of the tabbed over inserts (relating to scheduling of
> efforts by June 2015) was not in disagreement, but rather are principles
> on which we all can agree but may not be appropriate for inclusion in the
> proposal itself;
> (4)	The title of the document has been revised as a CRISP IANA proposal
> draft; and
> (5)	One focus of the edits in the attached draft were to highlight
> stability, continuity, the bottom up process (both for policy and
> accountability), and specific responses to elements in the RFP.
>
> This is not meant to be proposed as a final draft but rather a start to
> discussions.  While this reflects in large part efforts from RIPE and
> ARIN, we look forward to comments and suggested edits from the other RIR�s
> as well to have a comprehensive draft.
>
> One logistical item, I know that the agenda for tomorrow�s call includes
> an item for drafting tools; however, in the meantime before we decide on a
> tool, might I propose that the drafting team (myself, Andrei, Esteban &
> Craig) �has the pen� with regard to this current draft and will be
> responsible for updating the drafts accordingly in response to comments
> and edits received via e-mail from the members of the CRISP team.  This
> will hopefully avoid too many drafts crossing in cyberspace and getting
> confusing.  Then once we decide on a drafting tool tomorrow, we can move
> forward accordingly.
>
> Thanks,
> -Michael
>
>
>
>
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